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moth - haiku






on a screen
seeking the light
my words and a moth




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a moth keeps bugging me every evening

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  • Peteskid gold member
    January 26

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    ahhh yes... and the light is so attractive especially on warm nights, when the air has many little visitors...Pk

  • mina nagi
    September 7, 2007

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    Mari, This is beautiful... you've captured the moment so well... I've to keep my window close and watch moths banging their heads against the pane... as for the moths, the glass must be the worst invention...

    Keep up with the good work...

    mina


  • individuality gold member
    August 25, 2007

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    paper visions strike wings as flickers of life abort it's a bug's life at times, annoying. a good poem.


  • Dlvvanzor
    June 28, 2007
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    Stupid moths. Lol. No, I like it quite a bit.


  • dragons apprentice
    June 28, 2007
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    wow this is cool! it can be hard to write haikus. great job.


  • robert bolin
    June 28, 2007

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    I like this little poem a lot, It's short it's sweet and it's beautiful, Brilliantly penned thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your work, rob


  • ventus11
    June 28, 2007
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    dont really know much about haiku but i liked it.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    June 28, 2007
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    this is beautiful work


  • Desire gold member
    June 28, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Ok Haiku Queen
    Love this Mari!

    Powerful message

    Beautifully penned as always!
    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Inverted-Hearts
    June 28, 2007

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    OOO, it's short, sweet and expands itself with the word "words" giving it another meaning. I like it!

    You have a fan among bugs.


  • Creatress
    June 28, 2007
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    Very nice. Simple sweet thought.
    well done,
    Creatress

  • Just4u
    June 26, 2007

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    Maybe it is just thinking of the old Carpenters song

    Just like me
    they long to be
    close to you...




    fingers fill pixels
    wings flutter sending message
    me and moth, compose



    wings beat to letters
    matching the fingers drumming
    my moth melody


    Hugs...Eddy


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 26, 2007

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    Kill it dear Liza.

    So what are you saying, when you to me everything is confusing and in need of light? I think I've been insulted.

    It's cute, moths often shase after the light next to my computer, you know the one.

    There's a deeper meaning behind this, though it's possibly incidental because isn't it a no no to have deep meanings ina haiku? That's why I write cowku.

    I like it...now where's the brownies?

  • Joao Camilo
    June 26, 2007

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    Butterflies and their bad-dressed cousins are dominating your mind


  • macandrew
    June 26, 2007
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    Excellent.

    John


  • Anfractuous
    June 26, 2007

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    A moth bugs you, and so you write a poem. Nice! You can write a good poem about any little thing. heh, I like it. ^-^

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