Oh God
you were dwelling in me as incandescence
before I dovetailed as a sinner twisting me
into the somberness
conclusively I acquiesced me as the inkiness
with a confidence
that still I can be instrumental to you
when you relish to illumine as blaze
you simplify me as the blackness to unglue
Oh God...
Author notes
Based on a quote
"We must love not only occasionally, for a moment, but for ever. Everyone can love occasionally, even the wicked can."
A contest entry
- even the wicked can love occasionally by unraveled.
450 points, ended July 21, 2007, 33 entries
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wow
very mooving well done and good luck in my contest! -
You surely are a talent among talents, I've read a few of your writes so farm and again you do not fail to impress, Im ure it's the delicate way you word your descriptions, or the innocence you invoke in me while i read. regardless, amazing job
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i like this.. my favorite line is "before i dovetailed as a sinner twisting me into the somberness". in some places i feel like you used too much vocabulary. for example "conclusively i acquiesced" doesn't sound poetic but scientific instead. thank you for entering this piece
<3cassidy -
Your faith...is like a never
ending river, my friend. The
poetry you write inspired by
this faith is the most humble,
yet most profound poetry I
read on this site. My friend,
you are a light for us all...
Love, Lane
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This is abstract even to me...lol...but if I know your mind as I think I do...I think, this is showing God as a light inside you; that no matter how 'dark' or 'inky' you choose to allow yourself to become, He can become a 'blaze' and burn away the dross, and still you are His instrument to be used for His purpose. I found one line to be so interesting to read: "I acquiesced me"...this is almost like a mantra-type prayer phrase...I like it. Good luck in this contest, Dear Poet. Peace, Rhonda
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