Some days go great,
Im happy and glad to be alive,
my pain seems to have seems to have
disappeared,
and I wear a constant smile on my face,
and then there are day,
just like today.
when I wish my life
would just come to an end,
because the pain is just to much
for me to bare.
I feel so distressed and weak,
I crave the sensation I havnt felt in weeks,
But my dear frind I made you a promise.
and unbroken it shall be.
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Its something I can up with. Im not sure if it really makes since.
Please tell me what you think
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I love the free form in this...normally I'm partial to it but once again you've got alot of talent and you pull it off very nicly...although you may want to edit that little repeat in there "seems to have seems to have"...unless that was on purpose...and some spell check may be needed...but its nothing to serious...you can still tell what your trying to say...I think it makes sence...and I hope you have many more happy days ahead of you...I'm sure you will...anyways...great write and keep writing!
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i like it and you should keep promises and if its the sensation i think i'm glad you aint thats bad lol but it was a great poem and i'm glad that you have happy days that means things are looking up for you and you'll make it through message me and i'll give you my number or message me your i'd love to call you some time and get together kudos
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