6 a.m didn’t stop you
from turning into a sexy beast
you walked in on me, toothbrush-walking
round the bathroom
stopping to spit
when the nastywhite foamed too much
“penis breath” you whispered near my ear
then squeezed my ass
leaving me to giggle
with colgate bubbles in the corners of my lips
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this one is fabulous ... a 'normal' moment focussed on with suggestion and humour ... so nicely done >>> Gina
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It has a humorous quality to it, even if it's slight. Though 'slight' is sometimes a good thing, here, I feel that applies.
A nice poem that you have written here.
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This is such a great poem- one of the best on the subject (subject sex and or the close/ sharing of two beings). This poem encompasses so much more than meets the eye- you possess such talent.
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this is both perverted and adorable. applause on making me chuckle.
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i am inspired to never again set foot in a bookstore. finding poets i would otherwise have never come across if i had not stayed up late into the night, gives me a kind of high that i could never get by simply walking in and out of a bookstore or library. it's the unexpected treasure find, without knowing the name or history of the writer that makes it wonderful. i have read truly great poetry over the past 2 years in just one site alone, and the talent of some members in this place rival the talent of widely known published poets. words can not be any more ordinary than this, or more determined. if i was next to you, i wouldn't whisper, i would simply squeeze your ass.
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this is wonderful...
m
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LOL Very cute. You don't pretty it up, just capture the moment as it's intended to be captured... with honesty and some humor. Hell, those silly little moments are what make the day worth having, if you ask me. lol
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LOL - this is great
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Just loved the originality but naturalness of "toothbrush-walking" again the poetess paints poetically with panache.Neat.
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oh, and I just love "toothbrush-walking".. not the physical act lol, but the phrase is quite creative.
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ha.. cute in a very sexy way Ro.
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Only if it is true. I hope you told him to wash his face or he might be known for wearing Pussy colgne.
Love, Tom B.
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fatte hai yaar!!
but right now i can think only of dark sex lol........tu hbi na...
but class language hai
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(abhi tera toothpaste brand pata chala
)
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