warm skin slides between
shoulder blades and pulls to join
parted lips and tongues
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Poetic le Blanc
Haiku, Japanese structure. The poem leans towards sensuality but is more a physical representation of mild temptation.Although "tongues" leave me feeling a bit intense.I find embrace quite warm.
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sounds like a very rewarding embrace to me.
Makes one miss just that. A love felt embrace.To sweep your cares away.
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LOL!
Ok Ok Ok...listen to this...I decided to close my eyes and actually picture what you are saying...and it sounds like a very painful exercise..."warm skin slides between shoulder blades..." sounds like someone is stretching their arms and then "and pulls to join parted lips..." ok then someone does this really ackward back bend and kisses their own back ok now here is the funny part..."...and tongues..." dude! that is totally painful!...lol
Kay LaOn
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I like it!
lips and tongues
through shoulders
warm the skin
warm touch
reaches the right spot
I shiver
It gave me thoughts, feelings, my interpretation you can read, experience.... that is just for me to know
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that's one interesting thing about haikus and tankas, they breed.
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ok the one time that I have to actually write this..
I do not think that I like this one... not that I do not like it, I do not feel it. I like the image that it portrays but I just do not feel it. I think that it was lacking a warmth and sensuality that I feel in some of your work. Again, I am sorry I just did not feel it and it is only my opinion. -
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no worries. this isn't the sort of thing i'd normally write. was just exemplifying an idea for someone, and since i author the example, figured i should give it a title and post it.
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