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embrace


warm skin slides between
shoulder blades and pulls to join
parted lips and tongues


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  • Bruce silver member
    December 31, 2008
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    Wow, this is nice, too. Z - you really have a knack for this. Gives me shivers! I disagree with your last commentator. The smooth sliding motion indicated by the silibants is powerfully contrasted with the two hard stops in "tongues". Intensity is called for and you deliver. Well done, my friend!


    • Zahhar gold member
      January 6
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      I'm trying to remember what led to this write, but it's not coming to me. Just an idea that popped into my head I suppose. This one leaned more toward expositive detail and was less depictive. Thanks for having a peak, and a say!


  • Poetic Black
    July 11, 2007
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    Poetic le Blanc

    Haiku, Japanese structure. The poem leans towards sensuality but is more a physical representation of mild temptation.Although "tongues" leave me feeling a bit intense.I find embrace quite warm.

  • Tablet Of Essence
    June 28, 2007
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    sounds like a very rewarding embrace to me.

    Makes one miss just that. A love felt embrace.To sweep your cares away.

    Thank you for creating this write.

  • Kay Laon Anders
    June 28, 2007

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    LOL!

    Ok Ok Ok...listen to this...I decided to close my eyes and actually picture what you are saying...and it sounds like a very painful exercise..."warm skin slides between shoulder blades..." sounds like someone is stretching their arms and then "and pulls to join parted lips..." ok then someone does this really ackward back bend and kisses their own back ok now here is the funny part..."...and tongues..." dude! that is totally painful!...lol

    Kay LaOn


  • Mari Goes gold member
    June 27, 2007

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    I like it!

    lips and tongues
    through shoulders
    warm the skin

    warm touch
    reaches the right spot
    I shiver

    It gave me thoughts, feelings, my interpretation you can read, experience.... that is just for me to know

    • Zahhar gold member
      June 27, 2007
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      that's one interesting thing about haikus and tankas, they breed.


  • yourbentangel
    June 26, 2007

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    ok the one time that I have to actually write this..
    I do not think that I like this one... not that I do not like it, I do not feel it. I like the image that it portrays but I just do not feel it. I think that it was lacking a warmth and sensuality that I feel in some of your work. Again, I am sorry I just did not feel it and it is only my opinion.


    • Zahhar gold member
      June 26, 2007
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      no worries. this isn't the sort of thing i'd normally write. was just exemplifying an idea for someone, and since i author the example, figured i should give it a title and post it.

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