A rude, rotten man
That’s what you are
Called me the bitchy one
Crawling in a bar
Worse than a hunter
You abused your power
The worst predator
You tortured my soul
Refrain:
Yes those are the brutal truths
That you’ll never ever hear
But listen to this bitter truth
I know you’ll never want to hear
Chorus:
You might be the one I used to adore
You might in my life’s inner core
Still you left me here…unkempt and uncared for
But I’ll not take the fall…someone’s knocking at my door
A kind, loving girl
That’s what I am
Breaking from this whirl
My time has come
Better than a hunted
I know who to be trusted
I am your best prey
I know how to play
Refrain
Chorus
Instrumental
This is my greatest avenge
Loving somebody else is my sweetest revenge…
A contest entry
- He Broke Her Punk Heart.So She Broke His Emo Face (Prewrites Allowed) by Lady Nightshade.
600 points, ended November 11, 2007, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Revenge of The Ex by GypsyEyes.
450 points, ended December 24, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Judge Says
hey these are some really powerful lyrics! i would love to hear this played! thank you for entering and good luck in my contest!
~Dommi -
I would like the chords (for one to play music) for a guitar...if you have mastered that let me know...your piece, however is very awesome!
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I really liked this, it has great flow and reads very nicely.
I particually liked the last two lines, a nice twist of revenge in moving on.
Good job! Good luck in the contest, and thanks for entering!
Webber
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ooh i like this song, its very impowering. my favorite is your linking to the hunter and prey comparison, nice. and nice juxtaposed bitter and brutal/ it adds a nice effect to the stanza. good job
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