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An old barb-wired, zinc fence
props up the coconut tree.

 

 

Dada whistles, perched on
the freshly shined verandah
sacred as Sunday mornings.

 


It's something after six
daddy still hasn't shown.

 


I tell Dada how disappointed
I am; that someone important
must have happened.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Dada - my grandfather.

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  • lilAj
    December 2, 2007

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    you write so beautifully. I remember mama used to shine the veranda like a ritual too, but mostly on saturday evenings when the neighbors collect them children lol. I remember when she shine it with the coconut husk and red polish not a jack man or puss foot coulda touch it! lol


  • truembrace
    July 14, 2007

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    this is perfect stacy -- there is just something in these few words that has such enormity...

    love this.


  • Nicolette gold member
    July 4, 2007

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    Such a precious moment you've painted here in words, Stacy... I so loved the unsaid emotions here and the quiet of the moment. Lovely!

    ~ Nicolette

    • J.J. Sass
      July 4, 2007
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      Thanks so much Nic. It was one of the most uncomfortable moments in my life.


  • Peteskid gold member
    June 27, 2007
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    i am chuckling because i think i see a glimpse in a mirror here...very nice...PK


    • J.J. Sass
      July 4, 2007
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      Thanks for your kindness PK, though it's unfortunate you could relate so much.
      Best wishes to you,
      Stacy


  • naked roots
    June 26, 2007

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    and this is exactly why you are on my favorites...
    Excellently done


  • tara wilson gold member
    June 26, 2007

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    Excellent poem Imagery, wording, presentation, all so very excellent


  • Jersene gold member
    June 26, 2007
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    You bring the reader into this memory. Excellent!


  • Emerald13
    June 26, 2007
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    there is so much story behind the story ... nicely done (again) >>> gina


  • Heart Sutra
    June 26, 2007
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    Excellent!

  • Nicole Hanna
    June 26, 2007

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    "Someone important must have happened" now those are priceless lines. I can feel the memories in this piece, even if they aren't my own. Thanks for entering this.

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