What a beautiful person I found
What a lovely way I knew that I needed no one
Else, for me, to be all that I needed
Happy....
What a magical feeling it is
What a hated loss that no one else can see
Can it be, my dearest?
Please
As the street lights blink on and off
The music has no form as emotional mists
Pass and lose all meaning, all feeling
See.
Now I know what I means to be alone
To hate what you see, and hate the day
You see all that we need
No need to go, I need to be so close.
What a great life we have had
The sun did shine on all we had
Beautiful things never seemed so meaning full
No blood to be shed, no hate to send
And no need to hate what we had to be
Be.
Now I need to be this again
To feel the kiss against my brow
To see that lovely smile, and feel its glow
The one I love more than I can ever know
Now I need one last kiss goodbye
The love will fill and we can dance in the sun
Eternal sun, to make all needs and wants
Seem like nothing
The sun beats down on my head and I need only one
Only one feeling, only one reason, only one need
To love another just seems so....
What a dark place I found in this place
The street light blinks, one last time
For me, for me...
One day we will die and, our ashes will float
Into the sea, once more together
Drastic symbols, pointlessly unseen
Please tell me what you think
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Huh..and u said i was a better poet than u! ....emememm...
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This poem sends me through a pool of love and shows me an everlasting bond between two souls. Very beautiful, there is one thing I caught, in this line;
"Now I know what I means to be alone"
I'm sure you meant "Now I know what it means to be alone"
Just thought I'd let you know about that.
Very well done!
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VERY GOOD
Now I need to be this again
To feel the kiss against my brow
To see that lovely smile, and feel its glow
The one I love more than I can ever know
Now I need one last kiss goodbye
The love will fill and we can dance in the sun
Eternal sun, to make all needs and wants
Seem like nothing
The sun beats down on my head and I need only one
Only one feeling, only one reason, only one need
To love another just seems so....
What a dark place I found in this place
The street light blinks, one last time
For me, for me...
One day we will die and, our ashes will float
Into the sea, once more together
Drastic symbols, pointlessly unseen
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fine poem!!!!
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Wow!! This is excellent !!! Great job!!!
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beautiful, you have a way with words.
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such love even in the first line, such questioning such longing, a beautiful read all the way through thank you for the enjoyable time reading this piece. god bless
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The sun beats down on my head and I need only one
Only one feeling, only one reason, only one need
To love another just seems so....
What a dark place I found in this place
The street light blinks, one last time
For me, for me...
One day we will die and, our ashes will float
Into the sea, once more together
Drastic symbols, pointlessly unseen
what a beautiful piece...
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One day we will die and, our ashes will float
Into the sea, once more together
Drastic symbols, pointlessly unseen
You made me to ponder on the philosophical issues touched here and there in the amazing words of this
poem revealing the various facets of the life around us..a flow of the muse here bringing a kind of intriguing touch to the eyes and curious touches to the soul as well..Indeed a very thought provoking journey of the heart is here touching the magic of the poetry here..
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The flow and rhythm of this piece go so well with what you have say that the entire poem just seems to mesh well. Even the title seems quite fitting. Nice job! Thank you for sharing this with us at Allpoetry.
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Beautiful. The flow is amazing. I paricularly love the last stanza.
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Excellent. You are a weaver of words. Great job. I loved this
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Wow such a great poem, I am really liking what you did here. Great flow, and most of the lines are really great! There were some moments that could have been better, but overall, this was a great poem, and you are a really great writer! I will have to check out some of your other works, and you keep on writing!
Keep up the great work!
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theres alot of meaning in this, it gives alot of feeling and emotion, its deep. i also love the form and the single words. its great, well done
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Such depth and meaning in these words. 'Now I know what it means to be alone to hate what you see and hate the day' powerful words. Thank you for sharing your work.
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I must say Cast that I have missed your elaborate words and schemes as such I never knew your words wrap around me as if to say that you know how i feel and i know now how you feel for love is a great feeling that should be shared one and all. but never taken away as it is so many times but its something to see and charish. your words are strong and meaningful to me I do not doubt that youve seen these things my friend. Just remember who is there and you will never forget...
~Dragonia~
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