the time has finally arrived
and upon your departure
i weep
baracaded sadness
embroidered with composure
false strength
chaos surrounding...
your treasures from birth...
they lied
traits, their inheritance
i envied them
they are you
they had you
voltures of selfishness
twins to ignorance
that you protected
as you cast me aside
but i weep
burdened in sorrow
regret
i will miss
who you should
have been
mother
Author notes
thanks for reading
my mother died this past weekend, we have not spoken in 12 yrs.
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Wow. This poem brings about so many emotions one must feel in this situation, and I am sorry you had to go through with it. Sadness comes with any death of a loved one, but I could only imagine the pain and confusion one must feel for the death of someone they hadn't spoken to in so long. Excellent work!
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i'm sorry for your loss. as i am going through the same thing, i wonder if we'll ever talk again. Right now it doesn't but hopefully as time goes on things will change.
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amazing
bold and confident, says what it wants to say, very good, talented, well done -
its nice how you still seem to conjure the imagery up into our faces so that we can actually see the pain you are feeling.
I think it was a brilliant tribute,
With sympathy,
Lexy xx
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Emotional
Very touching poem. The reader can sense your mixed emotions; the sadness, the hurt, the regret, the fact that now it's really over with no more chances. But, remember, it is no more chances for her too. She will never know what she missed by not "knowing" the real you. Your memories might unfortunately last forever, but rest assured, time heals. Keep writing. It will help so much.
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im truly sorry for your lose..
well expressed though on how you feel... well done
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This was a deeply moving and impressively-written poem. There are no words to express the grief over the loss of a mother with whom your relationship was never fulfilled. I so profoundly relate to this. My mother passed away many years ago, and although we had a pretty good relationship, I have missed terribly what "could have been" these past several years. My father, on the other hand, is a relationship that never was allowed to materialize, due to divorce and his abandonment of me as a child.
This part really struck home with me;
"voltures of selfishness
twins to ignorance
that you protected
as you cast me aside".
Thank you for the invitation to read this poem. I am so glad that you shared this with me! I know how much it hurts that you will never have that bond with your mother. While she was alive, there was probably always still a sense of hope there. Sometimes, that is even harder, because there is no excuse for their absence and abandonment while a parent is alive. At least, in death there is an excuse that is out of their control for the separation. Maybe now, your mother finally realizes her true loss and wishes she could somehow reach out to you from the other side.
If you get a chance, read my poems, "Grief" and "Forsaken". They touch on these issues that I so feebly tried to do above. Here are the links;
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2948966
http://allpoetry.com/poem/2800542
My best to you, and my prayers.
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awwww this is sad ... i dont speak wif my mum ..i have tryed but it wont happen its goin to end the way you have ..i love these lines
i will miss
who you should
have been
mother
i wish you the best ... xxxx cheeky xxxx
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wow
first off I am sorry for your lost... I am also sorry that you two didn't have chance to speak before her death.. this was an intense piece to read... I hope that your healing process is a swift one.
Yvonne
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Very touching and sad write. The strength was not false, it was real, just because of the sadness it seems false. It must be a heart wrenching feeling, just look forward to one day seeing them again!
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This is a sad write. It hurt to lose anyone I know all to well thinking of you hoping you find some comfort.
Many blessings
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I am so very sorry to hear this. My prayers are with you! A difficult time and a wonderfully expressive penning from you. So sorry it carries such sadness. ~Tia
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I know. I miss my grandfather the same way. One day you'll be saved, I promise
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This poem really touched me, Poems are all about feelings and emotions and conveying them. this poem does just that,My eyes were tearing when i read this.
How can I tell you what I felt inside?I do alot of poetry myself but this poem hit it right on the dot. This poem says it all..it's verY touching!
thanks for sharing...
~~GRACE~~
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