garden of delight
stalks of grass - sway in sweet breeze
ant's safe canopy
tall thorny rose bush
dead branches - split from flower
quick exposed green orb
hard earthen walk way
cracked with time - filled with silk moss
leads to swift water
cascading vined bed
soft carpet - wandering buds
sleeping doe with fawn
above the tree-line
spiral streaks - butterflies soar
towards indigo sky
Author notes
"This is a great form of poetry that flows from my thoughts, though the picture I see is greater, I have summed it all up beautifully in such short verse."
In a list
A contest entry
- Haiku Contest by misticmoonlite.
675 points, ended September 24, 2007, 22 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Your help is greatly appreciated......thank you.
Comments
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Wow, each Haiku has a very beautiful image. Well done!
Good luck
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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ah I see you entered it my other contest, this indeed is a beaty, good luck...
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I like the wording in this piece for the subject matter, it makes it feel like a painting more than words.
Good write and congrats on silver.
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Congratulations on your lovely Silver award! This is a beautiful chain filled with brilliant images, well fromed and flows gracefully...Well deserving of silver
Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece, Have a wonderful day, Ken IBT
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Nice Haiku
this is indeed a lovely Haiku..the picture just put the view a little closer to the readers,thank you for entering our contest..and good luck..mm
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Absolutely beautiful. I love the poem and the picture before the poem. I loved the imagery. I felt like I was seeing what you were writing about.
In stanza 4, line 3, did you mean for the to be doe or is that correct as it is?
Keep writing.
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Thanks so much! I had in mind a picture of the graceful roe deer but doe would work too.
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Ok. I took roe as a mispelling.
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A lovely garden of delight indeed! I do say I wish this was a personal garden to enjoy all the tranquility you have written.
Good luck to you!
Des
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Outstanding Haiku
Very impressive It was a very tranquil piece of art.
(LISA)
"cascading vined bed
soft carpet - wandering buds
sleeping roe with fawn
above the tree-line
spiral streaks - butterflies soar
towards indigo sky"
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its a great write i love it....i love the extended haiku... well several in one.. i love it great write good luck in the contest never quit writing
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You have taken me through a lovely walk through the earth's garden. Thank you for sharing.
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Lovely writing filled with refreshment, beauty and hope.
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