She hides...
away from the world,
in her little spot,
petting midnight with her toes.
Gripping her faithful pen,
torn, used and falling apart notebook
draped across her lap
no noises, children, or phones.
Alone,
with thoughts
true feelings
Honesty.
She hides...
to be open,
be herself without being judged,
tears flow freely from all-knowing eyes.
She hides...
until the real world catches her,
and she is forced back into it,
sucked back into the depths of reality.
I hear his motorcycle
driving into
the neighborhood
put away my security
plaster a strong face,
over my opened soul, and
realize,
my break is over...
Author notes
Dragonfly40
Insanity's Break
A contest entry
- Da Crib: Challenge One by Tangled Angle.
400 points, ended June 29, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow Betsy your get some awesome phrasing talents;
"Petting midnight with her toes!"
That adds some insanely good abstracted imagery to this poem; awesome emotional feel to this.
One of my favourites by you
Ryan
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Quite different from the other entries but that's what makes it unique. I thought this was really good. Thanks for the entry and best of luck.
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All my entries are UNIQUE !!!!! lol I have a strange writing style and it's different. Not to mention sometimes I'm just 'off' and this was perhaps one of those times
Thanks for the contest though and I'll be around for the next!! Betsy
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lol Ok, tell me when you are done by IM.
When the contest closes I will judge this though, so hurry! -
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I'll hurry this one up - it just somehow got stuck - it will work as is if it has to, but I'm hoping that some meat and potatoes come to me to add to it because it's just a poor skeleton now lol
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LOL this anonymized thing is so pointless. I can still see the picture.
haha I love meat and potatoes-- especially mashed potatoes.
Montreal Steak Seasoning on Steak is awesome. You should cook it one night! You'll be hooked.
[it's a tad bit spicy]
but freaking good. xD
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I like it! I can't tell if it's about you or your daughter though lol. Thought it was her up untill the last 2 lines.
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All me!!! lol Thanks. I haven't seen you around much - all okay? Betsy
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