Let me see those crucified palms,
From which ants crawl.
I wana caress your breast.
I know this relationships
Been on the rocks,
But where there are rocks
There are beaches.
Everyone loves beaches!
Don’t tell me I’ll never change!
I’ve dragged my murderous demons
And religious epiphanies, far enough.
See the donkeys’ blood
On my jeans.
Yesterday my father
Came to me in a dream.
We look so much alike!
Like Oedipus, my inferiority
Got the best of me.
It’s a shame good looking people
Have to die.
Oww slicer of eyeballs,
Tell me why,
A blind woman prods my severed hand,
With a walking stick.
No one cares about me.
Only about oncoming traffic.
“Let the dead be dead
And preserve the rest”
The boisterous crowd screams,
While circling around her.
This closed caption
Has come to an end.
No more camera tricks
Or plot less surreal story lines.
For now me and her
Are up to our necks in sand.
Punishment for our self- centered
And shameful acts.
All of a sudden,
Beaches seem to lack in luster.
As the water washes
Our epitaphs away.
Author notes
Bryant36
Check out the film its realy good
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I really enjoy reading your poetry.
It's great.I am know were near as good as you,but i have to say this is meh fav.
Good read -
I know this relationships
Been on the rocks,
But where there are rocks
There are beaches.
Everyone loves beaches
that line made me giggle at first
then by the end it turned beautiful
xoxoox
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thanks
Thats how it was for mw when i was writing it. im glad you liked it and if you have not seen the film check it out
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well i havent seen the movie, but i thought this was a great poem. i loved the way the pace changed and it seemed random and strange but then became sadly kinda clear... it seemed mildly psychotic and majorly awesome!
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Wow i must say at first as i read the poem i was like ok...what hell this doesn't make sense but as i read on i began to see the genious in it your pace and subject change keeps poeple intrested and then when they reach the end they are fasinated that you pulled everything together very good very creative and good luck
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thanks
im glad it made sense i worried if you hadent seen the movie you wouldnt get it. thanks you and i cant wait to see your picks
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It's really good, I like it a lot. I can feel the depressing parts of this. It seems devoid of hope. Once again I like your use of allusions. This is really great. It definitely flows better than the shit I write. I read it a few times to make sure I didn't miss anything. Good luck in the contest.
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