The woman he kept in his deeper needs
the mark of his world, beauty unto his eyes
grown in his thoughts as passion leads
in gentle waters ‘neath arched rainbow skies.
The mark of his world, beauty unto his eyes;
the anchor for his safe and sheltered lee.
In gentle waters ‘neath arched rainbow skies,
the place of love let his spirit be free;
the anchor for his safe and sheltered lee,
held sweetly beneath this Angel’s wing.
The place of love let his spirit be free,
set the moments of his life in joy arising.
Held sweetly beneath this Angel’s wing
and he closed his eyes into a wondrous glow.
Set the moments of his life in joy arising
and gladness, at long last he came to know.
And he closed his eyes into a wondrous glow
grown in his thoughts as passion leads
and gladness, at long last he came to know
the woman he kept in his deeper needs.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Rounds Contest - Round 2 - Now that you've introduced yourself ... INVITE ONLY by imgone.
450 points, ended August 21, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pantoum by Lj-.
370 points, ended August 7, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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1. Pre-written Pantoums of the above format are allowed to be entered, if they consist of four stanzas, only.
Nice write. I like the details.
Thank you for your entry,
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interesting contest, i like this form too...PK
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The woman he kept in his deeper needs
THis could be a soft sweet love song you have penned my friend Thank you so much for sharing really enjoyed
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Well done with this
An excellent pantoum that allows its readers to ponder their own meanings. Loved it! 
Thanks for sharing. Laura x 
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Very nioce, this is agreat poem you wrotre and I am sure they will come back.Good luck to you in the contest.
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That was great. Pantoum's are really difficult, you did well. I might suggest though that you base the emotion in something concrete, like a place, time, event; it makes it a bit more accesible to the reader.
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Breathtaking form and words that equally match, such poignant menaing, "the woman he ketp in his deeper needs" She could be a person or she can actually be your muse....love a poem that makes me think...this is smoothe in its rhyme and excellent form. best of luck!
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