Why did you have to go?
dont you know that I'm dying now ?
my heart is aching,
I'm weeping,my joints are week
I want you to come back...
my heart has stopped beating,
my lungs stopped pumping,
my blood stopped flowing,
my hair stopped growing
the sun stopped shining,
the rain stopping poring,
the birds have stopped singing
my whole world ceased
now that you are not here,
I lie in bed,doing nothing,
just entangled in thoughts of you
entwined in memories
I can never again enjoy,
images of you haunt me
constantly
I'm plagued with your scent
as i roam the house
please come home,i need my life back,
I need to live again
without you ,there's no me
I know its only been three hours but
I've missed you an eternity...
A contest entry
- Missing you ( Perwrites Aloud) by Rasmus.
350 points, ended July 5, 2007, 49 entries
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this is really good; I can really feel the emotion and loss here..only suggestion is a few gramma mistakes but otherwise excellent work here!!
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i just remebered...why i wrote this particular piece....twas when we broke up for a while ...(well two days).....
but i still felt empty when he was gone normally ! -
this one is kinda from experience...when ever i was away from my boo...
i just felt empty inside...and longed for him to come back!!
(hopelessly in love)
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I remember feeling that way a few times.
Good luck with this write.
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Great write
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Amazing, I feel your pain in your words. Loosing someone you love is never easy, whether they just leave, or they have passed away. Beautiful words.
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GOOD WRITE!!!!
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