I sit here,
thinking of you,
waiting for the tears to come.
Regret fulling my heart instead.
They told me that I should have,
spent time with you that week,
but at the time I was scared of tears.
My family needed me,
I had to be strong.
Now I regret not saying goodbye,
until you were gone.
When I came to finally say goodbye,
the tears ran freely,
but I still let no one see.
At night, when I think of you,
the tears come,
one by one.
So slowly that I can count them.
One, two, three...
I cry myself to sleep.
I hope you know I miss you,
because I really do.
I'm sorry I wasn't a good child.
I wasn't one you could praise.
If I could redo it all,
there's so much I would change.
From my attitude,
to the way I dressed.
I'd change it all for you.
When I was a little girl,
younger than I am today,
I'd dream about my wedding day,
and how you'd give me away.
We'd go shopping for my dress,
long and white with lots of lace.
Then we'd go pick out flowers,
lilacs and daisy chains.
I still remember how happy you were,
everytime I brought home lilacs.
Your warm smile and kind eyes,
would greet me at the door.
Lately I've been fantasizing,
about my first car.
You always said,
you'd teach me how to drive.
I wish I could have driven you,
to those doctor appointments.
Afterwards we'd get mickey d's,
and feed the birds your french fries.
When we used to go shopping,
you never had the best taste.
Now I wish I'd humored you,
and worn them anyway.
I wish that I could go back,
to the way things used to be.
I'd give anything,
for a night in your bed.
Just you, me, and a movie.
Or maybe we'd watch court TV,
glad those cases wern't ours,
yet so intrigued.
I'd make you dinner everynight,
and always get you water with ice.
I'd wash every dish,
and never ever would I complain.
I'm sorry that I didn't do all those things then.
I know there's nothing I can do,
to make you come back.
I'll try to be a good girl,
so that when it's my turn,
I can come see you in heaven.
It's been two weeks today,
since I saw you last.
Almost 3 since we fought.
Now I'm motherless,
and feeling rather lost.
I'm glad you're no longer in pain,
and that you're in a better place.
But I miss you teribly,
and I wish you'd come back.
May 11th, 2007
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THIS IS REALLY A SAD PIECE...NICELLY EXPREESED THOUGH....ITS ALWAYS SAD WEN YOU NEVER GET TO GOOD BYE TO A LOVED ONE AND YOU WISH THERE WAS SO MANY YOU COULD HAVE DONE DIFFERENTLY...I'M SORRY YOU LOST YOUR MOM....BUT THERE IS STILL A HOPE OF YOU SEEING HER AGAIN IN THE NEW EARTHLY PARADISE............IN THE BIBLE JEHOVAH GOD PROMISES A RESSURECTION FOR RIGHTEOUS AND UNRIGHTEOUS PEOPLE(ACTS 24:15)....AND THEY GET A CHANCE TO LIVE FOREVER ON EARTH IN A BEAUTIFUL PARADISE WITH PERFECT PEOPLE.......(PSALMS 37:29).......
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Sad But Wonderfully Composed
This made me cry and It made me think about when I lost my nannies (it is pulral) I'm sorry. This poem really makes you think about life and how you would change every thing if you could. But the past is best left alone.
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Wow this was the most emotional poem, I've ever read. I cried so hard. I could never know what it is like to lose my mother cuz she is still here. But I could feel the pain of losing someone as close. I know things you wish you could change but I'm sure they loved you just the same. "and I wish you'd come back". Was what hit me the most.. Wow..great job!!!
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masterful
I hope you win..........great writing
I'm new to this so I'm trying to learn from more experienced poets. Keep writing and I'll keep reading and maybe you can teach me a thing or two.
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This one really tugged at my heart. Very nicely done, but heart wrenching. A great piece of poetry.
Kelli
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Lovely emotions. Thanks for the entry, and best luck in the contest.
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A wonderful piece filled with emotion. Thanks for this great entry. Hugs, Bunny
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Another poem that has the same emotions of one I've read of you already in this contest. A very sad and heartfelt piece this is.
Leander -
I am kind of confused, your Mum lived far away and then you spend time with family as they needed you but your Mum passed away? Kind of confused.
If you ever need to talk you can, I'm sorry it's never easy to lose someone that you love and I love the way you describe all the beautiful moments you had with your mum and the quirky ones too. Beautiful
Thanks so much for entering & good luck!
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Great poem!
I love it and the emotion is brought out very well. It certainly captures your heart after a couple of words, and it is rather tear-jerking. Thank you for entering my contest!
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I love this. I could tell the words were heartfelt. I have lost someone close and I can empathize with you. It may not have been my mom but it was someone specail. I like the peice about mickey d's and feeding the french fries to the birds. I think it is great that you shared this. I know it is hard to cope but I have always found poetry to work for me, and I am glad it helped you. Great write!
Loves, Sarah
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this made me tear up a bit. but thats generally not a difficult feat. it definitely means it was very well written and emotional though. good work.
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Once again i enjoy this piece you wrote.......so moving.... such emotion....something that you can't see or read everyday....Keep up the good work...God bless YOu....Kathy -
wow i dont know how someone could bear to lose someone so close. but to regret no doing something is not the way to live remeber the fun things you DID do with that person and remember how they were when they were healthy and alive. But i thik your poetry is a great way for you to vent plus i love reading yours so full of emotion and feeling. I usually dont like free form but i LOVED this one keep writing and ill keep reading!!
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Crying for you lost
im so sorry you lost your mother, there is such emotion, such inspration, there depth and so much more to this poem than one could ever guest, the title reminded me of the song by simple plan, i can't help but wonder if you didn't lose your mother if that song didn't somehow bring about this poem, funny i know. great job! God BLess -
Oh my this is so beautifull!! Thankyou for sharing this write with all the emotion that I felt through your words!!! It's a truly fitting tribute!! Great Job!!!
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Sadly beautiful.
This write touches me deeply. I to am motherless child,made so by death. You have here a great work in progress. There is so much pain that is evident, but you need to decide how you are going to express it. Think about where the speaker is in time and place. This can help you focus your expression.(IE, at the graveside, "As my finger traces out each letter of your name I can't help but think...wish...remember...") Do you want the speaker to be emotional,flat,dead pan or to move between them like a dance of grief. I read your poem out loud a few times and I love it for the heart you put in it. As a tribute to your lost Mom it is perfect as is. However if you want to work on it , I hope my ideas have helped. I'm sorry it took so long.
Much Love
Dark
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Absolutly wonderful message!
Regrets, oh yes I know them as you do.
I really can relate to this write, I will be nominating this for front page after while, it sends a true message to everybody!
Thanks for this very personal piece.
When we used to go shopping,
you never had the best taste.
Now I wish I'd humored you,
and worn them anyway.
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Sorry but I asked for in and around 60 lines and this is way more. It is a good piece of poetry but outside the specifications. If you would like me to give another comment on the piece please IM me and I will do so after I judge this contest. Claire xx
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this one is one of my favirits of yours, very thoughtful, makes you think that you should appreaciate your mother mor
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I wrote this during school one day. I started during Algebra (3rd hour) and finished it in poetry (8th hour) It's the the longest I've ever written...it took up 3 pages in my binder.
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Why does the loss of your mother have to be put so well? Blast im almost in tears, this one is one to remember, trully fantastic!
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Thank you. *sniffs*
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wow
thats really good! i know it's hard loseing the only mother you had and it's even harder when you treated her badly but she loves you no matter what. i know what it's like and i love you chrissy. you're just like my sis!
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