Through true belief
orbits a planet of
one lie's true innocence
trapped in rock
like a comet's prison
never escaping.
Author notes
Um... I tried Ryan... hope it's not too horrible. I fixed it from 20 LINES to 20 WORDS... my bad... I thought it asked for lines... haha... -looks down-
A contest entry
- Super Quickie - STRINGS ATTACHED - 10 Mins 20 Words 12 Poets by Ryno.
300 points, ended June 25, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very Nice
Lmao Sweets. my Aunt Lynda had a contest wher eit was 20 lines instea dof 20 words but oh wlel. nice poem all round very well penned and good wording really made this an attractive poem. good work and keep it up
Daddy P.S. Congrats on HM Trophy
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But if the lie is smashed
like a comets tail on earth
then the soul is free once more
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this is great, love the imagery of comets trapping lies...
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Meg don't underestimate yourself.
I thought this was really good!
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Excellent work I really loved the idea of this... thanks for the entry and nice job...
Ryan -
A great write! I enjoyed reading it!
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Your Prompt is: SPACE EXPRESSIONS
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