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Lapsed Artistry

 

No longer past the broken windows

do the blackbirds fly. Streets lit,

dim lights left desolate, as they

dissipate with dawn.

 

Fingers smudge grimy panes,

mixed with rain. Both soft

in their unique touch. 

 

Visions of blowing grass

watched nevermore.

The fields wilt, cast under

death's grim spell.

 

Flowers ripped from earthy

beds. Turn to dust in vases.

Beauty fleeting.

 

Wind cast whispers asunder,

words carried to the outskirts

of their destination. Forgotten

then forever.

 

Curtains drawn, the city left

the only reality. Endless meadows

erased. Beauty left in memories,

them forgotten too.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

The Sisters Grimm
I like writing both.
(Image by p-dudko at deviantart.com)
This is about people in society growing up and forgetting the magic of childhood.

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Comments

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  • Amaranthine Lover silver member
    August 23, 2007

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    this is a gorgeous piece thanks for the entry

  • maa gold member
    July 2, 2007

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    a very beautiful poem, well deserving of the silver trophy ... heartfelt congratulations ...

    all the best,

    maa


  • Tangled Angle
    July 2, 2007

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    This is your strongest poem so far in the contest. Excellent job.

  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    June 25, 2007

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    Beautifully visual

    I think this is so very good. What a treasure. A wonderful entry. Well done. ~Pamela


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe silver member
    June 25, 2007

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    Excellent..I enjoyed this piece very much..

    Fingers smudge grimy panes,
    mixed with rain. Both soft
    in their unique touch

    Beautiful..
    Best wishes with this entry...
    Peace
    ~A~

  • Virginia Logsdon
    June 25, 2007

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    Geee! Very good descriptions.

    When I first read this, I thought you were writing about the aftermath of worldwar 3!You are so decriptive. I think it is sad that many people forget what it was like to be a child and lose the ability to be childlike.NOT childish-childlike!There's a vast difference!

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