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The Net

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The Net

Fishing boats come at evening light,
as little ones dance in the night.
Ocean floor resides in my mind;
dancing creatures of every kind.

Danger is clearly, in my sight.
Fishing boats come at evening light.
Undersea life causing no harm;
dancing creatures with loving charm.

Undersea life is unaware;
fishermen catch them in their snare.
Fishing boats come at evening light;
ending their lives seems so contrite.

Danger exists for you and me,
just like the fish under the sea.
So don’t give up without a fight.
Fishing boats come at evening light.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Quatern

A Quatern is a sixteen line French form composed of four quatrains.
It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain.
The first line of stanza one is the second line of stanza two, third line of stanza three, and fourth line of stanza four. A quatern has eight syllables per line.
It does not have to be iambic or follow a set rhyme
scheme.
S1 refrain is L1
S2 refrain is L2
S3 refrain is L3
S4 refrain is L4

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  • BellaD
    January 14, 2008

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    Gorgeous Verse!

    I am reading several of your poems to learn more about various form poetry...and learning I am! This is well done as always.


  • Denierim
    July 1, 2007

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    This has an amazing feeling to it. It seems a bit eerie, like a small mystery in the sea, but still hods such a strong story behind. I like this poetry form but from what I've read around here, not many can pull it through. That's why I like the fact you wrote such a wonderful poem with this one. Wonderful work yet again!


  • ellipsist
    June 29, 2007
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    very interesting... love the tone

    of this piece... very mysterious... I like the imagery as well!


  • Kiran silver member
    June 27, 2007

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    This is brilliant! I loved this one! Has a strong and powerful message along with fantastic use of imagery! I loved the picture too! Thank you for entering my contest and all the best to you!


  • Whoochi gold member
    June 26, 2007
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    Dollface! Splendid, always teaching, always a treasure to read....


  • roses on fire
    June 26, 2007

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    wow. this is so good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! this one is very well writen and kept form well!!

    phree bunnies

    love
    your daughter

    faitherz


  • second-born
    June 26, 2007

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    wow...you never cease to amaze and surprise me...this poem of yours is such a delight to read...and it has a lesson to impart...you made this form of poetry a very easy thing to do...God bless you always dear poet...


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    June 26, 2007

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    This was awesome my sweet. I love this style. One day I will try some of the forms that you have so brilliantly done and described...Thanks for always making your pieces so wonderful.
    Soulful Woman


  • PoetsAngel
    June 26, 2007

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    Gob smacked! Brilliant, I want to be just like you when I grow up!


    Cathy


  • JohnnyD gold member
    June 25, 2007

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    Young cubbies must always be aware of the dangers that lurk in the dense jungle, all is never as it appears, death trawls for the unwary. Remeber that.



    Dad


  • StarEyes
    June 25, 2007

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    What a great read this one is!!!!!! I love it and I love the message in it!!! Fantastic!! I have never tried this form, wait what am I talking about? hehehe. I have never tried most forms, LOL. Great job and best of luck in this contest!! Keep that pen flowing!!

    and much love

    Nyetta


  • bedovich
    June 25, 2007

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    yayyyyyyy hun thanks for da poem :this is sooooooooooooooo great great work dearest i love this laotsssssss


  • Desire gold member
    June 25, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Magnificent piece You have penned and
    love the story You weaved
    in this verse
    Gorgeous form!!
    Wow!
    Wooooooooooooo hoooooooooooooo
    Love it
    Never have tried this
    but will give it a whirl

    Thank You for sharing this busy bee!
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    June 25, 2007

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    Do I have to follow him? *sigh* OK. I love the childlike quality of the writing. Because of that voice you are able to do things that a more mature voice couldn't pull off. The theme seems to be a bit of a morality play, although we never know who the fishermen represent in our case, to imagine such a danger is not difficult. Very good. Three bunnies.


  • RedAquarius
    June 25, 2007

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    I love this form, it's one of my favorites. This is soft yet forceful, excellent metaphors within and I have to admit though, my first though at seeing the title was the Inter-Net - hehe, I'm such a geek. I'm glad I was wrong though, this was delightful to read.

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