True wisdom I am longing to embrace
But lessons seem so hard for me to learn
When brain short-circuits in its frantic race
And for some peace of mind I simply yearn
Yet ego-mind has just one goal : to earn
The tempting fruit of knowledge and of fame
Seduction makes the flame of passion burn
Intense desire, impossible to tame
But what’s the use of futile form and name
When after death they quickly fall to dust ?
So now, it’s freedom from the mind I claim
And, gladly, in “unlearning” I shall trust
A soul who wants to reach a selfless state
The mindless realm of heart will contemplate
Author notes
a spenserian sonnet is written in iambic pentameter and consists of 3 quatrains and a couplet, with an interlocking rhyme scheme of abab bcbd cdcd ee ...
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Beautiful
Such a wonderful job with this sonnet. I simply loved it. Well done.
~Pamela 
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Bravo!
Allright, that's what i'm talking about, yo, we got a hot one here! lol This had all the ingridents that i'm looking for, thank you so much for entering! -
This is a very different form, I admit I've never tried, nor seen. I'll have to bookmark it as an example, should I wish to try it. The words in the piece, though, I can relate deeply with. For when one "unlearns" and loses the trappings of the ego, then they can achieve deeper and greater wisdom. Not just gainful knowledge, with expectations. This is very smooth and written well, my friend.
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reas and re-scored
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thank you so much, dolly ... I guess I escaped the fate of elimination which was assured with such a mistake ... well, it can still happen, but at least not for such silly reasons ...
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Perfect! We don't see many Spenserian Sonnets here on AP I'm so glad to see this lovely one. You are a true master poetess.
Love,
Amera ♥
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Excellent! You write with such elegance and this flows so well! Brilliant use of language and imagery! All the best in these contests!
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Exceptional
This sonnet is just brilliant and shining with truth and wisdom. Thanks so much for sharing this marvelous poem, and all the best of luck in the contest.
David Michaels
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well done
You have grasped the rigours of this form and used it well! The message is one of my favorites, which after hearing enough times, perhaps it will sink in. Your first two quatrains have a pace like an overheated mind, and then in stanza three the futility of ego's tricks is made evident. Take another look at the last line, it seems long. Best of luck Sweets!
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thank you margaret, you saved me from certain elimination ... how silly of me ... but it's corrected now ...
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Outstanding
This poem is full of spirtuality and has great flow and I liked the intricate language and the way you contemplate your thoughts and feelings. We all can learn more and I liked how you embraced this theme searching for spiritual peace. Impressive
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read and scored
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wow, this has a really great flow to it, and tone. Plus it's message is spoken perfectly. I could spend a paragraph talking about this, but I will refrain!!
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this is truley wonderful writing I've may have seen this form but did not know its name I love the form... its flow is delightful and your words run deep with emotions a wonderful write maa, Best of luck in the contest...have a great day
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