I shuffle the moments of you and me
only to find if they still breathe
within the shadows of your sins.
blood drips from my crying womb
sinking in multiple moods
for old drugs and crude liquor
I bob you up and down
to fetch the missing part of my heart
instead...
your dirty hands escape to those lanes
where local pimps dine together
cowardly running for a fresh fuck
Holding broken blades
soaked in my palms
I grunt,
when you could have feasted
on any famous harlot...
why finger my young vagina?
if you knew,
that wasn't your taste
why?
You Rotten Scamp!
Author notes
A rant..HAD to puke out
Blackend Heart
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A contest entry
- Scum of the Earth: A Contest About Betrayal.... by PerfectImperfection.
700 points, ended July 3, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ensnarement of Sorrow [ a dark poetry contest ] by gasolinequeen.
445 points, ended August 22, 2007, 38 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Feel Something by edit my world..
425 points, ended September 8, 2007, 59 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Misery of Love and Hate by CatastrophicSmile.
360 points, ended October 2, 2007, 17 entries
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The last line almost makes this anticlimactic because the word "scamp," while having negative connotations, is often used as an endearing term. Maybe that is what you were going for, but as I said, it betrays the anger that you build throughout the rest of the poem. Thanks for entering.
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Wow, this is just wow. Thanks so much for entering. I'm left speechless. after reading this...i just sat here...frozen.
This was wonderful
Great Write
<3Dani
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i read all of your last series of dark poems, and i had to stop on one of them to comment – sharp, powerful, and even though you are still looking at times for that impossible to find light in the tunnel, you turn bitterness into a powerful weapon masterfully controlled within your poetry. this specific poem has a crude/rude beauty to it which is very tough to master in a balanced way, yet you did it in a great way.
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Jeez ... this has to be the most bitter write I have ever seen. It's greta to rant it all out instead of keeping it inside of you.
All the best
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You are only one of the many whose secret lanes that rotten scamp has traversed because a great gourmet that he is he knows variety is the spices of life.
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but its not very wise to have spicy life all the time! More spice may burn one's tongue one day leaving the person tasteless
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I cannot agree, as, for example, there are writers who never tire of writing erotic pieces. In fact they seem to be specialists in it. They are cheered by their readers more and more, saying more the merrier.
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original! powerful!
zen
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Such a very powerful and intense piece. Very well written, making every line count for the worthlessness gifted upon you. Excellent rant!
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naughty
this is naughty..especially the last lines..
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Wow. This is amazing. Beyond any shread of doubt you are one of the best poets I have had the pleasure of reading works for. You have a vast amount of talent. Keep up the great work!
[AngeloftheNight
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thank you so much for your sweet comment. If you wana peep in to more dark work, am sure my poems in "period" list wont disappoint you either
Ankita
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hahaha oh ankita you have to learn to play the game better than they ever can. you have to always be one step ahead of them. you have to make your peace with being yesterday's fuck and find solace in knowing you will never be sold to the next.
be strong. always. your rant's will do the job
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What an edgy write. I could feel the anger rising as I read this. Great emotion on this page and I applaud you for this impressive piece
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Someone is angry. I found this to be a very powerful and bitter piece. Relationship gone sorely bad perhaps? Not too sure but, this is very provocative and definitely packs a contemptible punch. Very nicely done.
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Kita, This is highly powerful poem. Yes Child abuse is on the rise. We should curb it. If I am right, we should cut not only the most valuable, but the tongue and all the fingures and let them roam around. But your poem does all those things. Let the governments bring about stringent laws to stop this and punish the rotten scamps
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but what I mean by "infant" here is immature and not necessarily related to child.
thank you.
A
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it's good to get your emotions down, helps sometimes. Hope you can start to feel better.
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Very Impressive!
Different. With a biting edge. I love the closing lines in this. It drips with contempt and anger that's hot enough to boil the flesh off of bone. You have created some very powerful emotions here and the imagery fits the words and theme well. I think you have done an awesome job.
♥ Touchof1der
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Kimbery,
your comment means a lot...because I have read your work and know your experience in poetry
Thanks for reading it
Ankita
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A very honest and powerful rant it was. Hope you got it all off your chest. Very well done..Good luck in the contest.
Soulful Woman
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