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Emancipation (hybridanelle #23)


I guess I've gotten tired of sickles knives and daggers,
chucked about with nearly careless ease,
with all the wily wounds that women have to offer
to any fool who offers up his heart,
trusting like a lemming the old disproven notion
that every man must have a missing half.

I think I'll just delight in moonlit walks and sunsets,
the playing of the wind in bamboo reeds.
I guess I've gotten tired of sickles knives and daggers,
the momentary love, the counterfeit devotion
that lures a man into a sense of calm,
trusting like a lemming the old disproven notion.

I suppose I'll just enjoy my own good company
instead of putting up with all the grief,
with all the wily wounds that women have to offer
with every promise planted with a kiss,
with every tender touch and every supple motion
that lures a man into a sense of calm.

I find I much prefer my solitary freedom
to walking over eggshells field by field.
I guess I've gotten tired of sickles knives and daggers
and all the broad assortment, weapons of emotion
balanced on the fingertips of love
with every tender touch and every supple motion.

I imagine days are smoother without the crazy weather
that comes with intimate affinity,
with all the wily wounds that women have to offer
the sorry sap who seeks a loyal lover,
deluded by the dream of a lifelong soul connection
balanced on the fingertips of love.

I reckon now it's time to meditate on vapors
rising from the stream of life, and breathe.
I guess I've gotten tired of sickles knives and daggers,
with all the wily wounds that women have to offer
as lightly as they offer their affection
to any fool who offers up his heart,
deluded by the dream of a lifelong soul connection,
that every man must have a missing half.

 

 

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  • Anno
    November 3, 2007

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    Pain

    Every poet needs the pain like the roses need the rain. You have indeed experience a great amount of pain and it has drawn from you a endless ocean of beauty. You have penned a masterful image of hurt. I loved the title, it ties in with the story being told in the poem, you have been emancipated for the delusion of love. I really loved the line "balanced on the fingertips of love", it is a elegant word picture. The recurring daggers and knives motif, sort of drives home the pain aspect. I hope your soul recovers soon. *applauding loudly* *standing ovation*

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  • Kay Laon Anders
    July 13, 2007

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    Gee wiz..lol (always wanted to say that)

    I think I commented on this at myspace ...something breif and meaningless I'm sure...lol. This has a lot of irritation in it but yet it is kinda like the backpacking poem...the liberating feeling...I am not sure what happened between you and your latest love but I am sorry if you are hurt Erin...lol...Erin you make all females sound like they are waiting for some man looking for true love to rip his insides out and shove them down his mouth...and then laugh like a hideous villian...I am sure you are just relating your experience with women...which hasn't been ever after for you....do you believe in ever after? I do...I'm just not sure it has happened yet...or even how it happens...what does one feel inside when they realize they have met that significant other? do they feel like now they are completed inside...do they have that rage like feeling that all the songs talk about..that you can't live without them and won't live without them!? if they found that one person would they really chase them to the ends of the earth to get to them and tell them how they feel, like in the movies? and if it is that strong does it ever fade away or does it just keep burning even after one of them die? i would like to know the answers to all of that and I pray to God that i don't get broken like you have...you seem to have lost hope my friend...that there isn't anyone out there to make all your dreams come true...i think she is out there for you but you just have to wait...and then you can tell me why love is like a red red rose...lol....great passionate write though.....I loved the freedom in you speaking to me again...the freedom wants to be heard obviously..lol

    Kay Laon

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  • nilav
    July 10, 2007
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    i liked this...a man walking alone with all the mixed feeling of life,love and relations ...reaching to some type of philosophy...interesting..

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  • Crate and Barrel
    July 8, 2007
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    the lemming is natures retard. the robot chicken says so. and your background is killer, did u make it? the fourth stanza was great, and as a whole i liked it.

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    • Zahhar gold member
      July 8, 2007
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      yep. made it from scratch, to be mirrorable (i know that's not a word--but it works) so it could be turned into a background image. the art represents a style i've fooled around with for years with colored pencils. glad you liked the poem and the background.

  • Amanda1
    July 3, 2007

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    This is very beautiful. Life is easier without the complications of life - but much more empty. Brave the turbulent waters of love and you will find salvation on the shoreline.
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