The women come here wanting painted wishes.
Our duty is to make them all come true.
We aestheticians serve them like they're dishes.
You might think that we're all a bunch of swishes,
That primp and curl and straighten out a "do."
The women come here wanting painted wishes.
We cluster round the customers like fishes,
We make decisions since they have no clue.
We aestheticians serve them like they're dishes.
"Let's try a different color, like Alicia's!"
"I'll trim your bangs, then iron them for you."
The women come here wanting painted wishes.
We're regimented better than militias.
We're proud to be an able-bodied crew!
We aestheticians serve them like they're dishes.
Author notes
I thought it would be fun to write the first 5 stanzas of a Villanelle to make 15 lines.
A contest entry
- 15 lines/15 entries/15 min...pay it forward! by poet2angels.
475 points, ended June 24, 2007, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice
I think this just made me smile.
Very nice work and I am pleased to see a trophy of recognition here. A very enjoyable poem. ~Pamela 
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very creative and it has the feel of a villanelle surely, so very well done with whimsy...PK
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very unique take on the prompt!
I like the form and your poem is excellent!
Humorous and beautifully done...
Lynda
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nice I can almost smell the perm coming out ewwww
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Good luck
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your prompt is
painted wishes
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