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My Neverworld

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Heavy black boots.
Dark plaid pants.
Bruised flesh.
Black t-shirt.
Dark brown ponytail.
Graves.
Bubbling Diet Pepsi.
Half a pack of Marlboros.
Ash tray.
Computer with an attitude.
Monsters on the book case.
Books about politics.
Writing book.
Don't ever use this pen.
Porcelain dolls.
The Misfits are watching me.
Unmade bed.
Rabbit food.
Burnt out candles.
Blue sun shines through the wall.
Unorganized CDs.
Loose random notes.
Angels.
A 22 year old stuffed rabbit.
Confederate flags join the union.
A VCR, but no TV.
Photographs.
Empty Snapple bottles.
Oxymoron, the Unseen;
Billy Idol, Jello Biafra...
Me.

Author notes

This one is stuff around me in my room that defines who I am. It's not very good, but it's a good excersise and a good way to learn about me. I only used the stuff inside my room that defines who I am, most is direct, some is in symbolism. I've done this in other rooms to define other people I know, but I'll post just this one so you can get to know me. Give it a chance and read to the end, I know it sucks, but you could get something out of it. ;)

Written August 14th, 2003

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  • Aerestheth
    August 31, 2003
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    Interesting idea. I definately find the idea creative. I must admit, the poem didn't exactly thrill me itself, but you did say that it was during writer's block and I'm going through one right now, so I know that sometimes you just have to write what you can to get out of the slump. Kinda nice though, I can learn about you.

    Bragi PV

  • UnFoRgIvEnSINS
    August 14, 2003
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    thats you! gross! not i'm just kidding nice one. very...descriptive. i'm like that also...sorta...i don't smoke! hate it....i like how the sentences weren't really sentences...get what i'm saying. it followed a no nonsense pattern. i liked it.
    *~*~*~*~*~*SHANA*~*~*~*~*~*