you caused so many complications,
dizzy spells to my head.
im twisted into confusion,
you left me an empty bed.
hate pumps through stories,
the ones i write you now.
I used to write you love songs,
but i dont remember how.
when you left, you took my sensitivity.
You took my every star.
What will i wish on now?
all the lights have gone too far.
leaving me after one night.
we were together for a year.
this is exactly the kind of thing
i knew i should always fear.
no words of apologies,
no "excuse me because im leaving".
the cold air swept in on your side of the bed
and the smell of lonely left me greiving.
i know i said "i love you".
thats when you shot me with your stare.
dragging broken dreams down my spine,
if you hurt me, you didnt care.
im sorry you felt leaving,
would solve your messed up thouhgts.
pounding frigid fingers in my skin
left me seeing spots.
you hurt me bad dont you know?
you left this body bruised
then you felt when you were done,
you were perfectly excused.
your perfections of simplicity
i thought i always saw.
you dropped them at my feet,
when you started breaking law.
i was young and innocent,
with fire in my eyes.
but you broke my wishing stars
with your heartless lies.
peice me back together.
wont you at least try?
im laying here broken,
im trying not to cry.
oh boy, you drove me mad.
its soon going to be over.
i gave you my word and my love,
im waiting for your imagination to occur.
hate presses closer,
suffocating air tight thoughts.
i will get you better,
leave your stomach in passionless knots.
when this night is over,
you will feel how bad it burns.
ill walk away with satisfaction.
here is your heart break, your turn...
Author notes
i hope this is whatyou were looking for...not a true story, but sort of someones elses story...good luck everyone in the contest! =]]
A contest entry
- Still don't know what love is.... by flyingphoenix.
850 points, ended July 15, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think...
Comments
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great write well done


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This is exactly what I was looking for. It's very emotive, great descriptions.
The flow and rhyming scheme were great, and it's *maybe* even better as you stated it was not a story that happened to you.
Keep it up!
Webber
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Wow
This was great,it's the sort of poem that I wish I could write. You told a story with such emotion, well done.



