I envied and admired him
for juggling with the invisible thread
between your navel and heart
while I could barely catch it
for solitary instants
that slipped by so fast,
so fast…
You say placebos work fine
only if the spouse is never told
just what there is in the closet
beside crushed shirts,
but it took me about half a year
to forgive myself
and it will take one day more
than eternity
to stop wishing I could tell you
that I looked for him and
might have even been given
a few of his
precious little words.
Author notes
Written June 25, 2007
This is a real experience. No I have not told the person. I want to and I think he...er...might forgive me... But more than fear of rejection, the reason why I don't say this and apologize is that he has this "what you don't know won't hurt you" philosophy when it comes to confessing such things in him. This happen at the end of 2005/beginning of 2006. But it still affects me...
Option 2
A contest entry
- Skeletons in the Closet? by XHollowXEyesX.
800 points, ended June 2, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful. Intense. Pacing is perfect. The only thing i'm not keen on is the repition of fast. Or maybe it's just the '...' I'm not a fan of elipses in general, but that line just distracts me somehow.
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hello my friend... i wonder how things worked out since you wrote this.
Haven't read you in a while but its still the same subtle intensity in your words. hope you're ok my friend
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Ooooh, i like this, for the spoken and unspoken. Very nice.
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cute
this was so sweet and i kinda sense a hint of vulnerability. like that heartbreak no one talks about thinking its ur fault. -
Working it out is hard
We are always working it out. Guilty secrets.
This is such an 'in your head' write - I love 1st person narratives.
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Very good write. It is truthful yet not too revealing. I think readers can relate to the emotions and regrets.
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what a stunning piece of writing. You have expressed your emotions and your experience with great use of language and style. I love how you dont go into detail and create a story out of it. Keeping it how you have allows the reader to be able to make more of a personal connection.
great work,
Thankyou for entering.
All the best
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I can see why you're feeling like this, for fear of what he might say when you tell him, if you do anyways. A secret as such might be better off not told to him, for that it might come back to "bite you in the ass" as x Empathic Rose x has said. Good write and good luck.
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Very well written and sad to read. Brought back some painful memorys but beautifully penned. Good luck, not only in the contest but also in the future.
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Thank you
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wow, this is the first poem that spoke of something that happened to them and how it made them them. this is a beautiful poem, and i hope it goes well when you tell him. u will feel better without that hanging imbetween both of you, even if he doesn't want to necessarily hear it.
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Of course it still effects you. Any deception or lies or truths not told will come back and bite you on the ass, it's the truth and it sounds cliche but it's very very true. I know from personal experience, a lot now actually if you ask me. If you need to talk or whatnot you can message me and I'll gladly talk to you about things. Thanks for your entry!
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