Why do I kill? Because it gives me a thrill.
While in control, I am the King and every victim is my Queen.
In the night I walk alone waiting for My Queen to walk home.
Slowly I declare you mine and surprise you from behind.
A little ether is all it takes to get you back to my place.
I have to wait till you wake for my pleasure I can take.
High is my ecstacy when you're screaming just for me.
I like to peel inch by inch your skin, as I hear your painful screams.
It arouses my inner being as you bleed from within.
A little torch I take, burning your peeled wounds to a bake.
The smell of your toasting flesh is a sensation I love the best.
With my tongue I lick the wounds, as your frightful cries fill the room.
I hear your moans with anguished pain, begging me to stop this torture game.
Through your nipples I place long hot surging stakes.
With every pierce your screams expel excitement to my ears.
Like music to my soul your torture makes me whole.
All night I can’t rest for there still comes the best.
I cut your fingers one by one, as the blood through your veins succumbs.
With every whack of the knife you cry, as I place your fingers in a skillet to fry.
A crispy finger delight just for me to eat tonight.
Blood runs down your hands, as I release the restrictive bands.
You bring your hands to your face, as blood dibbles every place.
I thrive on moans, screams and fear, your death is nearly here.
Your silence brings me rage, so with my knife your heart I engage.
Cutting out your soul, for your pain has gotten cold.
To the trash your body goes for no more pleasure it holds.
I sit and eat my finger delights, dreaming of what's in store for me tomorrow night.
In a list
A contest entry
- Dark or Bright by PinstRIPedZOMBIE.
350 points, ended July 9, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Raven Qualifier - Dark: Anger, Angst and Goth by Raven Contest.
450 points, ended August 1, 2007, 124 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Picture Inspired Dark Poetry by ennovy.
600 points, ended July 17, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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What a hungry person you have created eating human parts. Crispy fingers and human heart tomorrow...yummy what a feast..Are we invited to dinner...just remember I don't want to be dinner....thanks for joining our contest....Novy & Brazos
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this is truly WICKED!
Loved it
~sugar~
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This is truly demented. Well written bursts of macabre thought. Nicely done. Thank you for your entry!!
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your poem made my spine go chill!!!!!
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Intense!!
Wow, I need to keep my fingers away from skillets.
I think Hannibal Lechter has this on his refrigerator.
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You really think so, I am still laughing with your great comments. I am not much of dark writer. but I try. I too like to venture out of the same thing, love and sadness.
thanks my friend
LISA
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that was good....i really like how you cut off her fingers and fried them up and ate them, that was awesome. keep up the good work and good luck
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wow this was dark and intense and I will admit I liked it from the first line to the ending words thank you for this wonderful read.
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I think I found the next serial killer in my contest.
Very dark graphically dark and extremely sinister
Now I want you to know I have a loaded shotgun in my house! Very good.
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I recently researched and wrote a poem based on the serial killer, Ted Bundy...and your poem just gave me to the chills to remember many of the attrocities he committed during the course of his crimes. Of course, your poem also has touches of Jeffrey Dahmer, the serial killer who also ate his victims.
Chilling poem which really shows the dark, demented side of such killers and I think by writing this in first-person, there's an extra-chill factor in the reading of this poem.
Best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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Dark tale of wick delight the dark fans will be thrill with this write. For those with a weak tummy might not want to read this write. It is well written the content is very good. It almost a short story it contains a intro,body and a climax of the story.It does leaves the dark fans wanting more.Very well done. I wish you the very best in the contest. Good luck.
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What a disgustingly gruesome and horrific story this is …
… but I thoroughly enjoyed reading every line and visualising every image in it, as horror is a genre I like. This poem is cannibalism at its best or worst, which ever way we view it.
For a dark tale, this poem is incredibly light to read and I was enthralled to the end. In fact I feel it ended all too quickly and I’m waiting for “tomorrow night” for the next instalment. I’m not going to comment on the content because it clearly speaks for itself but I think readers of horror will be able to enjoy this piece to the full. There are a few minor errors that if corrected would make for slightly better presentation. Line 14: “your” should be you’re. Line 17: “inter” should be inner or internal or something similar. Line 27: “though” should be through. Line 30: “you” should be your. Line 36: “sur-comes” I think should be succumbs, meaning to yield or possibly something similar. I feel this author would make a good horror film writer, if only for the imaginative ideas that are present in this work.
Thank you for entering the Raven Contest 2007 and good luck with your entry! Your work may also be viewed by other Raven judges.
Northern Raven
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Very hair raising I loved it....The diversity you show is amazing I stand and applaud you my friend!!!
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Thank you for your grand comments greatly appreciated. (LISA)
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Yikes!!! Hannibal the Cannibal just came to mind! A swim in the dark pook, heck, laps! You certainly penned a chilling piece, I'll let you know how me nightmares turn out tomorrow!! Excellent work!
~tia
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Well did you have any nightmares, with this crazy write. Thank you for reading this write. (LISA)
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Is there anything that lowers the esteam, this is sensationally acticve in all manner of form. Grreat
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Wow Love your comments. Thank youf for reading it. (LISA)
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wow that was so violent and disturbing i simply adored it! i like the "sick love" genre you added to this. it can mean so many things. in this case truly gorey and so much fun to read.
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Wow I love you amazing comments. Glad you enjoyed this gorey write.(LISA)
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well it fits the contest good, good job.
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Well I am glad this was what you were looking for. Thank you for the review and for the Silver greatly appreciated. (LISA)
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Whoa,
LOL..
You're a trip.. Did I tell ya that yet, because you are... but a good kinda one. 
I like the fact that my favs pen different styles, and on unique topics once in awhile...Lets me see their talented in all areas of the pen.. Nice job here, dark imagery, very captivating! Thanks for sharing, pen on my friend. Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo
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No dear you never told me I was a trip. I will take it as a complement. I am learning all the styles of poems I always write about sad or broken hearts or love. So I have to try my hand at dark gore. Just like when I did humor not to bad. Thanks for your support and grand review. (LISA)
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silence would never bring me rage only sweet happiness to many people yell at me so it be sure happinee great write keep doing well
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Thanks my friend glad you enjoyed the dark side of me. (LISA)
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I agree with the last guy, this is deffinetly dark. Dark, but it has more to do with fetish than anything. But it still holds a good chance for exploring the dark and 'loving' aspects of the kill and savoring.
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i guess you can really call that dark lol. nicely written. im not much for poems about killing or torture but i like this one. good luck in the contest.
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Well my friend most dark have to be about death or wanting to kill. Glad you enjoyed this write. thank you for the review (LISA)
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wow this is really a first rate screamer..it made me sweat..well done on a great 'horrible' work..peter
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Wow Peter I love your comments. "Real screamer" Glad you enjoyed it. Hope it will not give you night mares. (LISA)
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what an imaginitive imagination you have dear sis. Great job as usual. You always amaze me time over again. -Inc."
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Thank you sis I do have a dark side I think we all do. Just some of us darker than others. (LISA)
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Wow, this was pretty amazing. Its so dark, and twisted. This piece was full of such imagery. Very nicely done. THanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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Thank you for you outstanding review. Glad you enjoyed this dark piece. (LISA)
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This is absolutely delicious... I must say, you had me excited and rather aroused by this dark masterpeice of blood and prolonged torture, the gore brings a smile to my face and a pulse to my heart.
Thankyou very much for showing me this marvelous gore poetry.
I'm bookmarking it to read whenever I feel especialy twisted.
~Raven
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Wow your quite dark your self. I bet you are also amazing at writing gore pieces too. Thank you for you chilly comment and gory review. well appreciated glad you enjoy this that much. (LISA)
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BAH HAHA
THIS IS AMAZING!!!!!!!! Sooo eery and dark. A twisted write i must say, you have quite a mind on you!!! Kinda like mine, hell, if you write stuff like this often, you should go check out my shit.
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I will check out your site for I to like dark write. This is only my third try at super dark writes. I am still learning. Thank you for your grand review and glad you enjoyed it. See you in a dark alley Dear (LISA)
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i like to peel inch by inch of your skin woo remind me to have bail money ok. your nipples i place long hot surging stakes wow painful as shit frying fingers sis woman what am i going to do with you? i taste the oscar. I am so serious great piece sis i love your rage and dark devious side in this very well delivered I am fucken impressed i love this. you shocked me great shit ~ 
it this rock
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Well sis you like to sexually take apart you man. I like to peel his skin inch by inch. Hahahahaha. Thank you coming from you that a big complement. I really tried to make it gorey and dark as possible. (Lisa)
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