Sounds of screams fill the air
Bombs going off everywhere
Heard it through the world
Heard by all- Heres lives broken ball
Spun on a heartless gesture
so greedily taken
So many American lives
So short measured
Last words of love over the phone
So much left unspoken
The pain was stroked with infinite care
Courage of those who dared
The evil of our enemy has taken its token
They tried to kill us- they didn't even care
Burned and buried alive
Thousands wont survive
Lost amongst the rubble
Id take it back today
Remove all that pain
But its out of my hands
See our home invaded
With so much hate demonstrated
Whats this happening I cant get it into my head
Cleared without notice
What they did to us was so bogus
How unfair
That they had to die
Falling out of the air
They tried to take our faith from us
But they cant take our pride away
I wish I could wake up and say it was a dream
I wish I could look out my window
and still see the twins
Our tears shed in silence become the strangest of words
we will not be afraid
we will not run and hide
Only the strongest country wins
We have friends and neighbors on every side
Our justice will be found
But justice is not enough to bring back
the scrap metal and body parts from the ground
They wonder what will we do now
We will stand up and take our place
we will stand up for ourselves
Its time to look the enemy in the face
We have prepared ourselves for war
our support built up at such a pace
The image of our death was their mask
But now its our turn to ask
With American justice reigning down
Are we ready for the plane crash now?
Author notes
Please never forget our tradgiv losses that day and those that will never forget learn to find some peace.
WE WILL ALWAYS REMEMBER!
Written August 14th, 2003
A contest entry
- September 11th by Feline2001.
400 points, ended September 14, 2004, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The tragedy on 9/11 by WesBreezyxxx.
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GREAT
ALL I COULD SAY IS.... OKAY WELL ACCUALLY I AM SPEECH LESS. THATS HOW YOU MAKE ME FEEL RIGHT NOW. THIS POEM WAS PURE GENIUS. THE IMAGES. EXECLENT. I JUST HAVE TO SAY GOOD LUCK IN THIS CONTEST YOU DESERVE IT. BRAVO JOB
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Strong words with a great rhyme and rhythm. May I suggest that you change the background and have those images perhaps at the top of the screen, since it is very hard to read through the pictures. It takes away from the impact of all you are trying to say. I would like to re-read it without struggling to see what you wrote. Your words can be stronger than those pictures, since you gave those pictures a life of their own. Much peace.
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It read like a drumbeat - a march to war, a march of resolve, a march of patriotism. You captured what happened and the determination that emerged from the ashes.
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the background adds an astounding impact to your thought provoking words. excellent and well written.
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thank you for entering this in my contest-it is beautiful, and the background brought tears to my eyes. This was a tragedy that will never be forgotten
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THANK YOU ALL FOR YOUR COMMENTS THIS ESPECIALLY MEANT ALOT TO ME TO HAVE PEOPLE COMMENT ON. THANKS SO MUCH FOR READING AND REPLYING!
~LF
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Excellent
:'( Very very sad but still a Great write impressive as well keep it up and remember never EVER GIVE UP JUST KEEP IT UP IF U FALL GET BACK UP AND TRY HARDER AND GOD BLESS :-) IF U WOULD LIKE U COULD READ SOME OF MY POEMS AND TELL ME WHAT U THINK OK ITS YOUR CHOICE AND PLEASE IF U DO PLEASE TELL ME THE TRUTH ABOUT WHAT U THINK I DONT LIKE WHEN PEOPLE LIE ABOUT THE REVIEWS THANK YOU AND GOD BLESS AMERICA WE WILL NEVER FORGET 9/11/2001 IT WILL ALWAYS BE IN OUR HEARTS FOREVER -
I don't think anyone will forget that day. I find it a little hard to see on this background so I just highlighted it. This is good, you spoke of a horrific day very well. I don't think we are ready for another plane...I don't think we are ready at all.
Great job on this...
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Callie this is an awesome write, no I don't think I will ever forget that day. Tears rolled down my cheeks as I watched the news. Prophecy unfolding before my eye on the news daily since then.
I think this would be much easier to read if you broke it into stanzas. Other than that it's very well written.
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Wow. (hits self for making such a stupid and obvious comment ). I tried to write about tragedy and such and never even got close to this.
wish I could wake up and say it was a dream
I wish I could look out my window
and still see the twins
Our tears shed in silence become the strangest of words
Are some of the best lines in my opinion, whatever it's worth. Thank you for the comment on my poem and I look forward to reading more of your work.
-The Self Proclaimed Demonchild
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