Sitting in complete darkness
Tears on my paper
Wondering what will happen to me
Now and later
Why depression
Why all this pain
My life has been screwed up
Which is a shame
You've always been there
Argueing with me
At least think of what you say to me
I have feelings too,cant you see?
When you ask me whats wrong
Your still mean to me
And when I tell you whats wrong
To you,its just sympothy
I dont want to talk to you
I have no more words for you
Cause I have realized
You dont care if Im blue
Why depression
Why all this pain
My life has been screwed up
Which is a shame
You keep saying sorry
As if you really mean it
You and your attitude
Dont really fit
I never really knew
You can be such a mean person
You really do hurt me badly
Expecially when you start cursing
You dont hurt me with your hands
Its just the words you say
They are very strong
And the worst part is is that it happens every day
Why depression
Why all this pain
My life has been screwed up
Which is a shame
The way you act twards me
As if you were a tuff guy wannabe
And I just keep crying
Cause you think nothing of me
Well thanks for giving me your attitude
Keep hurting me and thinking its ok
You have gotten it to where I hate you
Like I said,think of what you say
Why dpression
Why all this pain
My life has been screwed up
Which is a shame
Author notes
In this poem I tried my best with the ryhming being that ryhming is the best form of poetry to me....so tell me what ya think.
A contest entry
- Anything. by Sonofdead.
800 points, ended June 26, 2007, 138 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ensnarement of Sorrow [ a dark poetry contest ] by gasolinequeen.
445 points, ended August 22, 2007, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Congratulations on your trophy for this one!
This is pretty deep and sad. Sometimes we
forget to think before we speak and things
end up becoming ten times as worse than it
already is. It is not only very disrespectful
but, also disparraging to make someone feel
this way about themself. Hopefully, you have
moved on away from this person! I wish you
all the best!
Jeremy0826
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Well thank u very much.Once I found out I won a trophy I went crazy lolz....it was my first trophy...hehe.
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Congrats on the honorable mention. I came across this on the shameless page, and I must admit that it's hard to give a critical review when the author tells you they wrote while they were crying. I can tell this is a personal write and you did a really good job getting it poetic form, you do have a few words misspelled. Nice write, and I hope you feel better now!
♥ whisper
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very typical how a teenager should feel
it sucks. [the feeling]
but this is a great poem keep up the great work!
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I can relate to this. I like this a lot. This is really good. Keep up the good write.
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Thank u soooo much for ur comment.
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No problem
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awwwww
I am sorry for your pain. Life is to short and you are so young. Things will get better sweetie I promise. God bless you, Mark
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Thanks much for ur comment.....u really made me smile while reading it.
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Wow, this I can relate to. For me, it brings back when my dad would yell at me all the time and put me down. He does the same to my mom. Sometimes I think that he's heartless, but I realize maybe he's hurting inside, too. He just doesn't have a great way to show it or an easy way to deal with it. It's not right for him to take it out on us, but that is something to think about ... why would he or anyone else be that way unless there was a deeper reason? I guess sometimes that's not a good way to look at it, but I like to think of others and not just me all the time. It was a great poem, I loved it ... even though it almost made me cry.
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Im so sorry it brought back memories.But Im glad u enjoyed it.Thanks for the comment.
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wow...this poem said a lot...it had some misspelled words...but it was really good
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Thanks a lot.
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Past is past...
This looks like it's a very strong release. Like a lot of emotion wass burried here. It looks like you've finaly found an end to a problem. An end to a pain. Your emotion was written well, and strongly as well. Very strongly at that. Damn good job. I just hope that writing this has helped you get past it.
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Wow thanks a lot.
GOD BLESS
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Good writem good poem. good luck in the finals.
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Thanks so much.
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