You used violence
....And then there was silence
What more could I do?
My feelings mean nothing to you.
You care so little you shut off,
Mock, tease and scoff.
I try talking to you
But I don't get through.
We end up in a row
Things get out of hand, I don't know how
And then you used violence,
... And then there was silence.
Dis-belief sets in,
You hit me, the worst of sins.
Not much left to say now,
You just broke one of your vows.
You just hit your wife,
How can I give you my life?
You used violence
...And then there was silence.
Our future looks bleak,
We barely even speak.
Since you used violence,
There's been a lot of silence.
A contest entry
- Not another titles contest.... by Andu.
450 points, ended July 13, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow, I love the use of rhyme and rhythme here, even for as bleak of a topic as this one. If you'll excuse me for saying this, but I'm glad that you aren't with him anymore. Good luck with the future.
-Garrett
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Great.....I hope you showed it to him! Thank-you for sharing and thank-you for your words on my write... hush little baby!
This is superb!
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A very sad and serious situation to find oneself in, I really must say that, but you certainly captured the situation well. I like your use of repetition in the poem, it is very effective and it really gets the message through, especially since you opened and closed with those two lines.
Nice poem for the title I set, great work, thanks for entering my contest and good luck! -
wowwwww Awsome write sis
i love the repeat it adds a great touch to the poem ..the subject is of course sad and i hope its just a write ..but it a awsome one ...love you sis xxx cheeeky xxx
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