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Immortality

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Immortality

Immortal essence that keeps you sane.
O I am the phantom within your mind
and within your being I wax and wane.
I have no boundaries, I am not confined.

O I am the phantom within your mind
for I am nourished from your every thought.
I have no boundaries, I am not confined.
I live every dream you have ever sought,

for I am nourished from your every thought.
O I am the spirit which reigns above.
I live every dream you have ever sought,
my immortal essence thrives on love.

O I am the spirit which reigns above.
I grant you peace and self control,
my immortal essence thrives on love.
I’m always here, your immortal soul.

I grant you peace and self control,
Within your being, I wax and wane.
I’m always here, your immortal soul.
Immortal essence that keeps you sane.

 

 

 

Author notes

Pantoum
The Pantoum is a simple form yet more difficult to compose than the sestina. It is far more repetitive, for its defining rules are ABAB stanzas of four lines each, and the second and fourth lines of one stanza become the first and third of the next. It can be any number of stanzas long, but the ending line must be the same as the first. The result is a poem that takes two steps forward and one step back the entire way through, finally ending on the same note it started.

form source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • maa gold member
    June 29, 2007

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    pantoum is one of my favorite forms ... and you have composed it masterfully, so that the repetitions are not even standing out ... they harmoniously blend with the canvas and inspire a peaceful atmosphere ...


    maa


  • pen-inhand
    June 26, 2007

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    An excellat Pantoum. Very well done. I like this style very much. You've done a great job! Thanks for entering! Good luck, Kelly


  • roses on fire
    June 24, 2007

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    You have taken a wonderful idea and put it in a structured format without missing a thing! this is beautiful!


  • FallingTwilight
    June 24, 2007

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    This is a great piece and amazing as always. Great wording and excellent flow. I love the feeling the reader gets while reading this as well.

    Have a wonderful day and best of luck in the contest,

    FallenPoeticAngel


  • PerVirtuous
    June 24, 2007

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    I am in love with this. You have taken a wonderful idea and put it in a structured format without missing a thing! You are showing off here and I love it. I see a shiny cup! Three bunnies.


  • RedAquarius
    June 24, 2007

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    FABULOUS! This is amazing, the words are well-chosen, excellent flow and while I like the picture a lot, I like the vision you've created even more.

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