planes
scavenged skies black
& bit buildings raw
on a hemorrhage September
day.
Author notes
My interpretation of a 'man made disaster'.
A contest entry
- QUICKIE [13 - 13- 13] by Tangled Angle.
300 points, ended June 24, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - treasure chest for quickie prewrites by DancingRed.
300 points, ended July 9, 2007, 32 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is amazing (the sort of amazing that leaves me speechless).
Great alliteration and word choice, but what I like the most is the fact that each word plays a major part in the poem. There's no empty, space-filling words.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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wow.. that's like so totally awesome imagery!! i love how you personify this and prove it to be "man made"... just awesome!!!
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Holy Moly!!
Powerful thirteen words and I remember that event like it was yesterday
Oy!!
Images stained my Mind to the point of
smelling the smoke
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!!
Happy to see that quill dancing
Best wishes to You
Many blessings to You
and much love~ Desire~*~
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One of the best so far.
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that was a sad day .. i lost a relative very nicly put togefer fanx u ~
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PROMPT:
Use any disaster, man- made or natural, and use it as a metaphor or simile in your poem. [Example: Train crash or tornado] If you are clever enough, feel free to use more than one disaster.
In case some of you don’t know what a metaphor or simile is
Metaphor: Drawing parallels from two different subjects [Example: “The sea of dreams”]
Simile: Comparing two different objects by using like or as [Example: “The sea was like a dream”]
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