Crimson rose petals knitted on tender lips,
Stalk swinging before the sallow parchment
Deepening the gloss as duskiness trips,
Thoughts shimmer in aroused fragment.
Stalk swinging before the sallow parchment
At the threshold of mystic dark alley,
Thoughts shimmer in aroused fragment
Disclosed desires waiting to sally.
At the threshold of mystic dark alley
Exploring uncased skin above the robe,
Disclosed desires waiting to sally
Stimulate the soft skin, bearing the lobe.
Exploring uncased skin above the robe
Titillating convulsions risen and ashen
Stimulate the soft skin, bearing the lobe-
Measured intrusion of exploding passion.
Titillating convulsions risen and ashen
Deepening the gloss as duskiness trips.
Measured intrusion of exploding passion-
Crimson rose petals knitted on tender lips.
Author notes
for contest recognition - reckoning
.. my first pantoum
recently started writing form poetry.
hope this one came out well
do leave your comments.
A contest entry
- Rounds Contest - Round 2 - Now that you've introduced yourself ... INVITE ONLY by imgone.
450 points, ended August 21, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Adult: Men Only: rhyme by piccola.
650 points, ended January 30, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical comments appreciated
Comments
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Nice pantoum and you managed to keep it softly sensual with that warm tone. thank you for entering.
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lovely
seemingly effortless... this contest is my intro to the form as well, and i really like it.
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Beautifully written with class and style. I havent tried too much of the form poetry, hardly any.. but this was truly a wonderful example of what can be done when tried.
Great job. Good luck in the contest.
Soulful Woman
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good luck wonderful
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Wonderful for a first attempt. Good luckin the contest. Val
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Absolutely beautiful I think this is!
Well done!
Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest; this is lovely
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