oh, there! once again
the magic of rain,to ease our pain
hidden behind a butterfly kiss
peeping through lovers'glance with bliss
gliding with a caress through memory
color of happiness for us to carry
when can i own the spring
from which you gather colors and sing
Author notes
user name-'nilav'
A contest entry
- 10 entries 10 minutes by Heavenly Angel.
425 points, ended June 24, 2007, 6 entries
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You have used great imagery here. I found in your poem on the one hand the impossibility of holding bliss which, on the other hand, makes up beauty. Great!
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lovely
Hi, you have penned down a beautiful verse here. I love rains. and its raining here by chance right now...
good luck
keep writing
-Neha
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wonderful touch with nature and the senses, being in touch with things around us...turns rain into a gift and a flower into proof that we can still see the wonders around us...so very well done here...PK
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Let it rain
Gliding gently into your bliss is bliss, when it rains...
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Lovely wording and images. A nice soft, happy feel to this write.
thank you for the uplifting entry
best wishes
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this is very nice. i like it!
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Nicely penned.
Thanks for entering!
Write on!
*PEACE*
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Wow! you write such uplifting poetry! This was rejuvenating and done really well!
Becks
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I really liked the imagery in this. You write about the rainbow very beautifully! thank you for entering and Merry Christmas!
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There is beautiful imagery in this piece. in such few lines you have written with nice depth and meaning.
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Impressive
Beautiful emotional imagery. Such a few words with a big expression.
(LISA)
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Lovely thoughts on the wonder and beauty of spring.
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I love this! I love the spring time and you brought a lot of images to mind with this. You also brought a lot of emotional imagery. wonderful.
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very nice
sweet message of hope and acceptance.
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a spiritual and abstract quality to this very uplifting and positive poem. Best of luck to you in the contest...PK
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Very nice
Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest
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