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a housewife (haiku)






a housewife
watching "greg the millionaire" on tv -
the bailiff rings











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  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 9, 2007

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    Very clever one..
    Thanks for sharing,
    another nice haiku.....
    Thanks for sharing you.

    Peace, Timothy~


  • pvenugopal silver member
    June 25, 2007
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    Wonderful piece. I guess I am running short of superlatives.


    • maa gold member
      June 25, 2007
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      dear friend,
      thank you so much for your kindness of commenting on so many of my haiku ... I am still a beginner in this technique, but start to enjoy it ... excellent haiku poets here are charishma, tishu, myron, haikumonk and several others who just don't come to my mind right away ...
      great role-models all of them ...
      all the best,

      maa

  • FallingTwilight
    June 24, 2007

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    I like the contrast you created in this piece. It has a nice effect on the reader.

    Have a wonderful day,

    FallenPoeticAngel


  • Tangled Angle
    June 24, 2007
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    "bailiff"
    great word choice by the way.

    • maa gold member
      June 24, 2007
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      yes, the smart dictionary translated it right from the french word "huissier"

  • Tangled Angle
    June 24, 2007

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    This is a haiku? Shows how much I know about them! lol
    The only kind I know is 3-7-3.

    Ah well. This poem was original though, and I like the reference to the TV show [not sure if it is real or not, but you get my drfit] this was creative, and interested me.

    Thanks for the entry and best of luck to you!

    • maa gold member
      June 24, 2007
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      yes, it is ...
      haiku has to have 17 syllables or less, the 5-7-5 rule does not apply to contemporary haiku ...
      "greg the millionaire" was a series on french tv ...
      I just used the title because "millionaire" and "bailiff" would create a nice contrast between fiction and reality ...
      thanksie,

      maa

      • Tangled Angle
        June 24, 2007
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        Here in the US we had "Joe Millionaire"

        Yes, I liked your contrast... this was really complex, I think.

        Like I said in the comment I posted earlier 'bailiff' = great word choice. That word says what pretty much most of your poem is about.

  • Harrisham Minhas
    June 24, 2007

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    Hey friend!
    An interesting Haiku...nice contrast drawn here.


  • Roaddog Wolf gold member
    June 24, 2007
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    certainly

    made me stop and think about that

  • MargaretG silver member
    June 24, 2007

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    That sounds like a sudden interruption of boring normality by bad news! You've left it wide open for us to speculate, too.


    • maa gold member
      June 24, 2007
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      a wonderful interpretation, margaret ... I intended to create a contrast in this haiku between the glamourous millionaire on tv and the bailiff claiming the lady's belonging - a huge gap between fiction and reality ...
      since this assignement was about a "bad aspect of society", this is what popped up in my mind ...


      marion

  • Tangled Angle
    June 24, 2007
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    Not all spots are taken yet, but I am going to start anyway so those who are in as of now get a head- start.

    Your prompt: Write about a bad aspect of our society
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