I have fallen under--
your spell makes me weak.
When I see you its that desperate feeling
that, "got to have you" need.
I can do alright,
living day to day
working, watching, laughing, playing,
taking time to pray.
I forget sometimes just how much
you are a part of me
then your vision takes me over--
and you're all that I can see.
Compulsively I tumble
like waves upon the shore
doesn't matter what I need to do
I've got to have some more.
These obsessive flames will ebb
I'm certain, over time
morph into quiet embers
of peace filled, loving rhymes.
For now, though, I'm afire--
your passion fuels my thirst
blazing into night's cool cauldron
loving you so much it hurts.
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blazing into night's cool cauldron
loving you so much it hurts.
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"I forget sometimes just how much
you are a part of me
then your vision takes me over--
and you're all that I can see."
Nice diction and flow, with just one small thing to bring to your attention though; third line, 'its' should be 'it's' or 'it is.' Great write my friend!
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Thanks!
I get confused, using the possessive apostrophe sometimes, and use it when I shouldn't! I had forgotten about this piece! be well! John
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