You have told me of the ultimate prize
And there it is, right between your thighs
Soon as i seen it, i began to realize
My groin did ache, and my cock did rise
At first, i looked at your sexy eyes and nose
I saw your breasts then,I kissed both of those
You got slightly cold, as i took off your clothes
Then i touched your pussy,at first you froze
Please stop, you said, i`m not ready yet
So i stroked it gently, like a childs pet
You would soon change your mind,i would gladly bet
And sure enough, your pussy started to get wet
I reached up with one hand and grabbed a tit
As i ran my tongue over your erect,hard clit
Then you started to buck, as if having a fit
I was teasing you now, my tongue doing the trick
All of a sudden you came, very much in haste
I nearly went crazy at the wonderful taste
You cum so much, a nice wet juicy paste
I then grabbed you, by your slender waist
Your body was perfect,no, not too thin
I spread your legs, and rammed my fat cock in
My balls were aching,but i could only grin
Coz i was between your legs and committing a sin
I was banging my balls up against your bum
Then i filled your pussy, all full of cum
I was enjoying you ,it was so much fun
And your ultimate prize,Well i guess i`d won
I`ll never forget that awesome night
Your nice wet pussy,and oh so tight
It was out of this world,yes out of sight
I`m excited again,thinking as i do write
You also loved it,please tell no lies
You could not hold back, all your sensuous sighs
As i took control of your nice, damp,ultimate prize
That you keep safely hidden, in between your thighs
In a list
A contest entry
- Make Love To Me Guys Round ( 3 ) Invite Only by theredcatjazzoflove.
400 points, ended June 28, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Get me Hot by ali-a-fallen-angel.
450 points, ended March 16, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sizzling Hot by Fire-Fly.
500 points, ended December 6, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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SUPERB
An absorbing read, its only fault is its perfection. A great piece I enjoyed enormously.
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Wow
that is some wrap
Thank you
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very very nice
mm
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Thank you
hopefully it did
the trick
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Wild Me Didn't You...
this is some fire rocket type writting let me say i love it to deat a whole lot the rhyming was on the write speed and you were delicious you did this one dear I love It.
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Well thankyou ever so much,i had no idea you would like it so much.I`m only learning this caper so that gives me a bit of heart to keep at it.Obviously you read lots of poetry so to get them remarks thrills me to bits.Have you read any of my other poems?P.S. you have a beautiful looking face
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hmmmmmm
well end line rhyming isn't my thing.. nor is centred alinged text.... sorry hun
and i really do destest text speak in poetry... i wuz cos ur and such like... tsk tsk tsk
Stan... for a guy of your age... tsk tsk
and gee man... don't you know, you have two loins... so it is loins.. or did you mean groin? ....
erm... anyways, I've played with your beginning to show you how it can become plumery 
You told me of the ultimate prize
between your thighs
I rise
to the occasion
My loins ache
with that familiar
twitch, the sight of your nakedness
makes me sigh
The need is greater
than the touch
I see the fruit your bore
and each mouthful
becomes Eve's temptress
Adam is weak in my rib
You don't have to fill every line with cock,pussy, cunt, tits etc etc ... to get the point across
the best erotica is written leaving those words out and let the reader work it out for themselves... or if you're going to put them in... use sparingly and make every word count
this piece is silly soft porn and with some work it could be a good piece of erotica....
just my thoughts Stan...
G.x
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Thankyou for your opinion and you are probably right.I am open to criticism.
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cool... tis always good to get a new insight
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Give me back my breath
this was some ride and filled with the pictures from your pen Thank you for sharing the moment
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Thankyou sweet lady i`m glad you liked it
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