Is it cruel to fill a mind
With the possibilities of soaring?
That dreams are worth chasing?
Produce a pragmatic pile of possessions
Spend your time wisely
Demonstrate your committment to the cement
And try not to think too hard
About the sustenance of the breeze
How breathtaking the view from
Vertical horizons
Never take that kind of risk
For if you fly for a while
And that thing you didn't
even think about
Unmakes you
They will crawl over
Your broken corpse puzzled
At what a fool you were
Author notes
The Nymphs Speak to Icarus
I appreciate your knowledge of classical mythology!
A contest entry
- PICTURE INSPIRED by Arkbear.
300 points, ended June 28, 2007, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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oh man this is wonderful....and its even better when i'm stoned for only then can i see and feel in real life......what you see and feel for real......am i jealous..you bet i am....keep well my friend
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Rich... thick... thought provoking! Fly.. fly.. fly...
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I like this very much! It's a word that jumps at me too often, we tell our own mind those things to keep us from the search and cushion disappointment. But if you never try...
Brilliant work here!
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A double edge sword, isn't it? The cruelty of being made to believe you can soar versus the cruelty of being made to believe that you cannot. Well written!
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cruel as well these shackles
you would chain me to a field
cement and concrete daiseys
tell, what harvest will I yield
Life a breeze a melody
a dance not to be wasted
Lost would be the essence of
were one to leave untasted
Regret and rue not that which lost
more what never tried to do
What care have I if called a fool
If when alive....I flew
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Touched. Really.
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Fly high but be careful. I really like this poem. It speaks well both to society today and to the Greek story. Nicely done.
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i really like it, it was sort but very deep. i enjoyed it a lot, lovely job
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Very nice, and rather deep but enjoyable so well done
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Ah.
Good to read this again. You word crafter. Do you make reams of trees' hush and write lofty dreams on the wind, too?
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So deep and intriguing. Great job, but I agree with Nickelspring, definitely gold worthy...
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Wow this is deep and wonderful. Worth gold in my opinion
KW~
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I don't know what the picture was that inspired this write but I sure do like the words you penned here! Pam
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excellent write
great picturing
very sad but osotrue content
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Excellent
A very fine write. You express your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done. -
Never take that kind of risk
For if you fly for a while
And that thing you didn't
even think about
Unmakes you
They will crawl over
Your broken corpse puzzled
At what a fool you were
I sincerely think this should've won better. I get it, and it's the side of your writing I most like.
Good luck with the nymphs. Don't leave them in your house alone too long.
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Excellent wording! Deep, and full of the emotional passion found in classical mythology.
Congrats. on the HM
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In settings where all is constructed from truth that is bent, lies are common and accepted as truths. But all we have to do is take a look at events occurring around us and feelings inside ourselves to start doubting the things we were taught to be true. The conjurings of this world are just that; illusions that will fade like all else that has faded in the history of mankind. It includes the immaculate beauty that we sometimes are allowed to see in our dreams. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,
left
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Wonderful work ...
flying is for those who know how to fall landing on their feet!
So good to read you again ... and mythology is timeless ... we live it.
Love
Myra
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"Is it cruel to fill a mind
With the possibilities of soaring?"
Sighhh...No, Scribe...it's far more cruel to clip the wings of one already in flight. The one who seeks the freedom of the sky is not a fool; perhaps it is the ones who choose to remain earthbound that should reconsider their stance. Congrats on your HM, Ben~Jammin'. 
Wanda
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Not Bad ~
Thank you for entering !
This is great!
How breath taking the view from
Vertical horizons
Never take that kind of risk
For if you fly for a while
And that thing you didn't
even think about
Unmakes you
They will crawl over
Your broken corpse puzzled
At what a fool you wereBear ~
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