One Last Kiss
Please;
Darling.
Lipstick
Would Splatter
On The
Walls
And
We'd Have The Perfect
Massacre'
Smile;
Sweetheart.
You Have Her Now;
You'll Never Have
To
Go
Behind My Back;
Again;;
Gasping,
In A Puddle Of Tears;
Reflections Of Us;
Together
I Wont Sleep Tonight;
I Cant Stand
Those Dreams Of You
.
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Author notes
I broke up with my then boyfriend a week ago.
Today he found someone else,
And,
A Year and a half's full of memories doesnt just go away
x
x
In a list
A contest entry
- You break my heart into a thousand pieces and you say it's because I deserve better by Lie 2 Me Once Again.
625 points, ended July 11, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is so sad princess and it makes me feel like crying. This is wonderful and all of the emotion is expressed so vividly and wonderfully. I wish you never had to go through any pain like this. You deserve only the best in life.
I Wont Sleep Tonight;
I Cant Stand
Those Dreams Of You
I hate when memories plague us. Sweet moments turned to torture. Sometimes I hate love, other times I love it, but right now I'm not.
"Pain hurts, but we hardly ever die from it". That's true but I'm not quite sure if it's reassuring. Someday we'll be happy and our lives will be all rainbows and unicorns , or something close. Anyway, I'm rambling as it's nearing 6 in the morning and I've had no sleep but this is just wonderful Sophie. I love it just like I love you.
x♥x
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Great write..... I really like the lines
Smile;
Sweetheart.
You Have Her Now;
You'll Never Have
To
Go
Behind My Back;
Again;;
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guess what? stop writing poems about it! I'm serious... it doesnt help going back to feed your memories with beautiful words... I don't know, some people argue it's therapeutic... but i only believe that true up to a certain point! Anyhow, like the ending to this one!
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I'm sorry about this sweet♥
he's stupid. he let an amazing girl go.
guys are oblivious. he will regret it someday, but you'll have to be patient, men are very slow.
beautiful imagery and emotion in this piece.
xoxo
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guys are stupid.
but you my dear are brillant.
dreams are lame, that i agree. but bby it's gonna get better.
it has too right?
&♥;
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"In A Puddle Of Tears;
Reflections Of Us;"
I loved those two lines.
This was a very good piece.
I'm sorry for what happened to you,
But if he did that then he's obviously not worth it.
Good Luck <3 -
this is amazing!
its a shame that it was inspired by something so painful.
i loved it all, the ending was powerful and i can feel your pain.
im sorry hun x
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oh darlin! I can't believe he did that to you men are pigs.
**critique*
It's a really nice peice, I can feel the hurt coming through your words.
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Awwwww...I feel your pain my love, This is truely written from your heart.
I too am in pain...I discovered your poem under random. It really captures the heart. And u r right, you cannot just turn off your emotions. May you find resolution...this is a work of art. Galkimba
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