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Moonlit Walkway

A Hole in the sky
Shines down on still waters
Ripples part its path

Her head on his shoulder
His jacket on her shoulders
Cold air blows while hearts set fire

Author notes

Two of my good friends have been going out for a half a year....I basically just wrote what I saw

A contest entry

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  • N e a r
    February 16, 2008

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    You gave just the right amount of words and lines to describe a beautiful relationship. Even the actions of them being close in the second stanza sets off a well-placed image of the two. Let's hope they remain good to each other, and if they are now seperated, at least the memory is there.
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    Thanks for entering my Valentine's Day contest, and good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • SilverMoonFeathers
    October 29, 2007
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    Wow i loved this poem if only i were a pretty girl maybe i'd hava boyfriend -_-


  • XxGoldenxXDawnxX
    August 27, 2007
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    The imagery in this is beautiful. Thank you for entering this in my contest.

  • piccola silver member
    August 2, 2007
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    lovely. thank you so much for your entry. I asked for romantic and I got it. Thank you again.


  • crystallynnbradford
    July 25, 2007

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    aweee....this is soooo sweet of you...i'm sure your friends appreicate it....this is just so damn cute....thanks for entering and good luck in the contest


  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    July 25, 2007
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine

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