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Let Me Love You

Look at what you're doing to me

I can't believe that you can not see

All the things you've taken from me

Helping now to set me free

My peace is found in your eyes

Often so am I

Swimming in the deep passionate pools of color

Seeing myself in your reflection

Loving myself in your reflection

Caress my body with your words

I feel your breath at night alone

Crying out to the world

Out to you

Your heartbeat is my favorite song

I hear it on the radio

And in my lonely mind

I see your love and I cry

I want you to hold me forever

Hurt me and love me and need me

And feel me and breathe me

And swallow me whole like your favorite fruit

Licking your lips and savoring the taste

Take the nectar from my pores to build a highway

Carry me wherever you need to go

If you can't find your soul

I'll give you mine

It belongs to you anyway

I'll build you mountains

If you're ready to climb

I'll bring you Heaven so you can see the stars

You can feel at home

Sing with the angels in Gods glory

Home again

Free at last

All the pain subsides

Succumb to the purities of love

Happiness and faith

Let me love you

Let me praise you

Let me feel you

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  • Blondie19
    February 7
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    good

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    January 24
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    Thank you for your beautifully spoken entry, good luck in my contest, Josie

  • Raven Judge
    July 11, 2007

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    There is an obsessive quality at work here that I do not think is entirely without merit. While your word choices are sometimes juvenille, your clear dedication to not only the individual, but to the highest form of the life you could make together, is anything but. I can feel a maturity in the way you discuss the simple, basic forms of your desire in lines such as "Your heartbeat is my favorite song / I hear it on the radio / And in my lonely mind" and "Home again / Free at last / All the pain subsides / Succumb to the purities of love." There is an innocence that dwells in these passages, untouched by the sometimes more poisionous realities of passion.

    Thank you for sharing this piece.

    ~Das