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Boundless Measures (Spenserian Sonnet and Acrostic) (Dedicated to Cheryl)

Fear not for I am with thee saith the Lord;

adorn yourself with courage for each day.

in times of stress and bitterness and sword,

through darkness don't forget the Words I say:

hold on to truth and let it light your way.

Heed overtures resounding within you,

of these are notes that make your spirit sway:

proliferating joy crescendos through

each day a song to sing of life anew.

Lamented empty tears that go unshed,

outpouring of my mercy will ensue:

vacated beings, those for which I bled,

 

enwrapped in sure protection from above:

The greatest is the boundless gift of love.

 

 

 

 

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  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 2, 2007

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    Great inspirational Write, The style is Unique, Acrostic and sonnet, Excellent Write Duana I enoyed reading this.


  • sassylilpoet silver member
    July 2, 2007

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    Very inspirational and uplifting write, that speaks softly from the tongue. An acrostic blended in with a sonnet too, I think this is very deserving of award, very creative.


  • JenP
    June 26, 2007
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    This piece flowed so well. It was very soft and sweet, it set such a gentle tone. Wonderful stuff.


  • mamad silver member
    June 25, 2007
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    Read and scored


  • maa gold member
    June 25, 2007

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    a very graceful poem about faith ...
    a truly suitable subject for a sonnet ...
    elegant vocabulary and gentle words of consolation and encouragement ...
    wonderful ...


    maa

  • ea silver member
    June 24, 2007

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    well done; I was looking at how you had set up the lines and wondering if there was a reason but didn't catch on until I read Margaret's remark. I just would rethink the use of "don't" in the 4th l. I also wrote for that picture of the Italian skeletons entwined that you mentioned. Interesting to hear you linked that with my write here. Thank you and best of luck in the challenge.


    • duana
      June 24, 2007
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      Thank you for your advice on don't. I will think about that. Also, I didn't really directly link that picture with your poem- but your poem did bring back that picture! I guess that's a sort of link then, lol. Anyway, thanks for reading!


  • MargaretG
    June 24, 2007

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    Well done - the acrostic is an added complexity, and taking each as the subject for its lines is genius. Very nicely written, and wonderful thoughts. Best of luck!

    • duana
      June 24, 2007
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      Thank you Margaret. I wasn't 100 percent sure if you are "allowed" to structure the sonnet like this, but I thought I'd give it a go, and if it were against strict rules about the sonnet that I don't know about than somebody would tell me!

      I have a question for you if you don't mind. A few years back, when you were peacekeeper I took a course on here by demented soneteer, and I just recently went back in my notes after writing this. He had taught us that in each type of sonnet for every single line there has to be a specific type of rhyme (ie half rhyme, or eye rhyme, or whatever types of rhyme there are). I didn't get into the different types of rhyme in any of the sonnets in this contest. Is he technically right though? If so I will start paying attention more closely to rhyme.

      • mamad silver member
        June 24, 2007
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        I have checked several of my reference books on rhyme and could find no reference to the rhyme scheme you speak of. I have used Babette Deutsch's book Poetry Handbook as my main source for poetry. She has given pages to rhyme and not one mention in either the rhyme or sonnet essays does she mention this elaborate scheme. I wonder where your teacher found this.

        • duana
          June 24, 2007
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          Thank you. I have not tried to get a hold of him yet, but I have just read from all the lessons he gave us. If I find the link to his lessons I will send them to you. I am relieved to say the least!

      • MargaretG
        June 24, 2007
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        I have not heard of any rules like that, but there could be a better authority than me. Certainly most of my sonnets are not that good, and especially if I have been ignorant of this restriction on the types of rhymes!! Perhaps demented sonneteer can clarify it with references?

        • duana
          June 24, 2007
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          Thank you Margaret. I don't know if he is still here, but I will look him up, and see if he remembers me- and ask him about the rhyming. Back then, he gave us an assignment explained the rhyme scheme of each line, and then said write a sonnet copying the rhyme scheme- and if you do it correctly you will have written a correct English/speserian ect sonnet. These are the words in his assignment sheet- so I remember the agony of that! lol. But he was the most silent teacher any of us ever had, so I never was able to get it clarified! My sonnets were bad for his class though- cause at that time I never did understand iambic pentameter- and it wasn't until these contests that iambic pentameter thoroughly sunk in!

          Well I don't know why I told you all this- sorry for getting so chatty. Thanks for being so nice and answering my commment. If I hear from DM I will get back to you.


          • MargaretG
            June 24, 2007
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            It's my pleasure. I'd like to know what you learn. Best of luck in this competition!

  • luvdrkchocolate
    June 23, 2007
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    Oh. This is a nice poem that you have here. I like form poems so I came to see what yours was like. I don't know if you were off in your count or anything because I don't know how to do a sonnet but it looked pretty good to me. I thought it was very encouraging and sounded like a prayer that someone would say to themselves when they're having a hard time.

    • duana
      June 23, 2007
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      I kind of wrote it as God's prayer to us- for my sister who is going through a hard time- so you are right on the button in your assessment.

  • Aurora Ceres
    June 23, 2007

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    This is a very uplifting and inspiring dedication to friendship.  Wonderfully done. So full of hope. I really adored and appreciated the sentiments expressed in the second stanza, written so beautifully and dripping with truth. Wonderful work.

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