Nothing to break
The chains that hopelessly bind me,
As a thousand spiders
Crawl over and inside me.
No way to escape
The sinister creature in the never-ending chase.
Becoming paralyzed,
As it’s claws wrap around my exposed throat
Nothing to provide light
To lead me through
The endless, surrounding darkness,
Abandoning me to despair.
No way to bring back
My loved one, exhaling their precious last breath.
Their dying body growing cold,
In my guilt-stained, powerless hands.
Nothing to heal
The open wound of betrayal.
As those who I trusted most
Callously turntheir backs to me.
No way to stop
The blinding headlights,
And the silent screams,
As the cars inevitably collide.
Nothing to save me,
As Death waits in the shadows,
Beckoning to me,
And I unwillingly follow.
No way to hear,
Deaf to music and laughter.
Nothing to offer sight,
Blind to sunsets and stars.
No exit,
Trapped beneath the heavy earth.
Nothing to hold onto,
Drowning in the merciless sea.
No way to extinguish,
Burning in the ravenous flames.
Helplessness, loss of control,
Instills the deepest, ancient fear
Into the core of my soul.
Author notes
Option #5 in SobbingxLullaby's Contest
option 1-my fears
A contest entry
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Sorry for the long wait~ I'll promise to judge by tomorrow ~ I've been waiting on Dark to give me her two cents ~ She told me earlier~ but there were some additional poems submitted since then. I sent her a message... a few days ago~
If I don't hear from her by Friday I will close and judge then ~ Let me know if you have any problems waiting until then ....
Thanks
Mali -
Wow, the feeling just is overwhelming! Excellent job! Thanks for entering our contest. Remember we all have fears and you're not alone.
good luck to you! -
whoa deep...................
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i'm assuming your fear is spiders to an extent? just seeing because thats how i will better interpret the entries i get in this contest. this is very very good work, wow. I really like how i can feel the helplessness emittifying from the words. (ravenous flames, an excellent way to describe them) to critique - i found it a little dragging on with describing the death (maybe one or two of the middle stanzas doesn't need to be there) but i definetly like this piece of work thanks so much! and good luck
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This was quite a combination of Fears!
You had me bad enough with the bugs - then you (shudders) went and really did yourself in!
Great job on imagery!
Good Luck in the contest!
Tang
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Not bad! I liked this a lot. It had a certain something. The last part was my favorite, with the rhyme and just the distinct message. Nice job!!!
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