I can't do this anymore
I whisper to the cracked cement
Trying to avoid the look on your face
As I no longer have any of your belongings
In my posession
-Perhaps a sign in itself-
I hand you this note, this poem
To express what spoken word cannot
To tell you why this must happen.
We once broke down this invisible wall
Between us, only it is rebuiling itself
And this barrier widens into an empty void
With each cold stare I give
And each touch you don't.
We are polar opposites
You refuse to see anything
But cold black and white
While I embrace shades of gray
We will never be the person
The other seeks.
My presence is apparently a burden
Something to hold you down
Make you left behind
Supposedly I keep you under lock and key
While you struggle in your imaginary chains
You have created for yourself
And allegedly I have been the one
To deprive you of your dark wings
When all you wanted to do
Was fly far away from everything
Including me.
You could never give me the affection
I so longingly crave, I need
To feel loved, appreciated
I have revealed my vulnerablilites
And weaknesses to you
Despite myself and my pride
And again you leave me
Without support, without reassurance
without the sweet words
I practically beg you to say.
I didn't ask for much
But you refuse my requests
For the sake of rebellion
Because you are tired of
Feeling closed in with
All these silly rules and restrictions
And I am exhausted
Living with the full knowledge
That you could never want me
As much as I want you.
So we retrace the same arguments, same fights
With the nauseating sense of deja vu
That we have been here too many times
And our parting is long overdue
I can't do this anymore.
Author notes
option 3-falling out of love username: tigress3737
A contest entry
- Your 1st Love, What Went Wrong? by XxXxSilentXxXx.
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Beautiful and Stunningly Accurate
You clenched my heart with this (not easy to do), You reached into my heart and pulled out memories making this not just relatable, but felt. I truly felt your words. AMAZING.
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Thanks again for entering my contest - I really enjoyed reading it and it was very tough to judge!!! Enjoy your win
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*~*~*~THANK YOU VERY MUCH ~*~*~*~* For entering my contest!!! I hope that you had fun entering - I know I will have fun reading them all
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DANG!!! That was awesome!!! OMG I LOVED IT!!!! I know exactly how this feels!!! My favorite part was My presence is apparently a burden
Something to hold you down
Make you left behind
Supposedly I keep you under lock and key
While you struggle in your imaginary chains
You have created for yourself
And allegedly I have been the one
To deprive you of your dark wings
When all you wanted to do
Was fly far away from everything
Including me.
This was great!
Good luck in my contest!!
-Erin Lyn -
very good...good luck
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this is such a sad poem! But there is so much emotion it moved me! It's so hard letting someone go and it's so hard to say goodbye. At first - i wasn't sure if this was what i was looking for in my contest but when i got to the end, i realized that this poem has it's own little way of saying goodbye
Good write and good luck in the contest!
lines I like the most:
So we retrace the same arguments, same fights
With the nauseating sense of deja vu
That we have been here too many times
And our parting is long overdue
I can't do this anymore. -
great write well done....
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Excellent poem! Very sad and full of emotion. Thanks for entering
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this is sad a very depressing read but great work
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awesome write man. I love how full of emotion this is. It's all so true. great work, and good luck in the contest man.
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Wonderful emotion! Very well written, great word choice! Well done
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an excellent poem. so wel written expressing so much emotion.
Thank you for entering my contest, i appreciate you taking the time to do so!
Take care, Sam (Dreams27) xxxxx -
Trust me, I know how you feel. Thank you so much for entering my contest.
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