Reflection of her skin glistened in his eyes
She found comfort in the warmth of his arms
While he found comfort in another man’s embrace
Slowing losing his soul in his own lies
This world is only gonna break your heart
Nursery sits waiting for the little new comer
Mother mourns for a child she’ll never know
A tiny coffin gets put down to rest
A tormented life for a parent never to recover
This world is only gonna break your heart
Man looks for his love his whole life
Finds the girls that makes him go numb inside
So much that his heart chooses to stop
The day he makes the girl his wife
This world is only gonna break your heart
Girl's mascara bleeds down her face
The man who stole her innocence walks away
Girl whispers under her breath “Why Daddy?”
She disappears without a trace
This world is only gonna break your heart
Pain and lies, filled with despair
Torment and anguish, jealousy and deceit
A world with false love and resented obligation
A life where even karma isn’t fair
This world is only gonna break your heart
Author notes
Wicked game - Chris Isaacs
although there is also a really good version by HIM
A contest entry
- . by Aurora Ceres.
1250 points, ended July 7, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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WOW! I love that song [esp. the HIM cover], and you have certainly done it justice! Unlike the song, though, it had a very 'human' element that captured the pain of one who has survived such tragedy. You have reason to be very proud of yourself here... Congrats on the well-deserved silver!
Laura xxx
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what a great poem i loved the meaning to it. you put it together so well. it actually brought tears to my eyes. i mean the meaning the moral it just jumps out. i read your poem here 5 times and it just got better each time i read it. you did a wonderful job at this piece and i do mean wonderful. it takes alot to bring tears to my eyes and you did that. you are one of the first ones to do that well i needed to cry anyway lol.your poem makes me feel like writeing a new pome it was just wonderful i hope to read more of your work soon once again thank you so much for your beautiful piece. it touched me.
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I love the way each stanza starts a new story all relating back to the phrase This world is only gonna break your heart. I also love how by glancing at a line, it seems as though it means something but yet when you continue reading, it shows to have a deeper more significant meaning. This poem is spontaneous and held my interest well. GOOD JOB =D
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This is so very very true life is going to break your heart. It's not fair most of the time people say you have to know how to be sad before you can be happy. The only thing is some times you can never be hapy again. Koodles
Blessed be
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wow, this is so deep and true. Gives you very vivid mental imaged straight to the heart. Makes it ache and burn, makes you mourn. Gave me goosebumps and tears welded up in the eyes. Well written, glad to know there is a writer out there brave enough to tell the truths about this world and reality. Ur an artist, great work! Just great!
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i definatly see why you won silver with this piece, well, i havent read the other pieces but this one is awesome. i love the imagery that you used, like in the line "mascara bleeds down her face" i absolutely love that line. it is my favorite of the whole poem. but the whole effect of the poem is amazing. you captured the emotion of depression so well and showed the worst things that could happen. wonderful!!!
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I see this won the silver, I can't imagine what could have won the gold, it must have been undeniably amazing because this poem is absolutly beautiful. Such a sad read, so much truth spoken through your words and excuted so well.The title and the main stream of this world is only going to break your heart, you described it through out, with great ease. I truly adored your work on this piece. Reading it brought through emotions so strong in me, and in my book that's real art. Continue to write such artwork!!
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hard hitting and yet tender
I love the first stanza, there is real lonliness here and the poem is haunting in its' whole. Well done life can be so sad and to be able to communicate this to others is a gift... K x
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Very nice, so sad. Well composed I absolutely love the song you used, one of my favorites.
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Amazing as expression
Okay, I'm going to be perfectly honest. I am someone who has battled with depression, I have had my disappointments in life. I feel that your expresses an amazingly horrible darkness, and that it rises to a universal level. It does an amazing job of expressing that hopeless-darkness mindset.
But I don't agree with the comments that say "amazingly true." Good things happen in life too. Sometimes things do go right. I speak as someone who has foresaken hope and been damaged for it. Yes, this world IS going to break your heart. But that's not the only thing it will do. It will heal it, if you work together with it. You will find great things if you can rise to your situations. Sometimes, some things are impossible. But don't foresake the world's good.
~Arovell
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My goodness what a powerfull write!!! This is really emotionally packed! I am so glad I read this write. The title is what grabbed my attention but the words are what grabbed my heart!!!
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this is really impressive! very emotive. well done on your silver, i can understand why you got it! x
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wow
what a gripping write..a cold hard look at life..this one slaps you right in the face and demands attention..wow..you really nailed reality...excellent write..no wonder you won silver..this one really breaks your heart and fucks with your head..
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it will break you heart...and there are so many it has already broken.
'there is no fucking you, there is only me' seems and appropriate way of saying how it will break you. -
No wonder you are a silver winner.
This is such a successful poem that has captured the emotions well enough to make the readers understand what exactly the poet wants to say.
But it tone is what hits me hard. Very deep and I could listen to the tears clearly . Strong emotions. Well written.
The repetition of the first works for just nice. One of the best poems that AP has given to my read.
Thanks for sharing.
Congradulation on your Silver Win!
Love
-Kiddy
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this is one of my favorite pieces ever
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these lines almost made me cry:
Girl's mascara bleeds down her face
The man who stole her innocence walks away
Girl whispers under her breath “Why Daddy?”
She disappears without a trace.
i recently was talking to a girl on my help site on myspace who had this problem. it made me cry hearing her story, but hopefully i will be able to go to the police once ive got her name, and help her. i wish these things wouldnt happen in real life, that they were only sick fiction, but they happen EVERY DAY. and it disgusts me beyond belief. i LOVE this poem though, and i think you've done a terrific job!you didn't have to go into too much detail with each little 'story' and the vagueness in your description made it all the more interesting to read.
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Good luck on this contest.You wrot this very well and you are so right.I have been through alot of what you wrote as well as my chilren.Your grasp of what the world has come to is imeasurable.You had me from the moment I started reading this piece.Such a sad life this world is.Thanks for putting it into words.
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Pain and lies, filled with despair
Torment and anguish, jealousy and deceit
A world with false love and resented obligation
A life where even karma isn’t fair
This world is only gonna break your heart
This broke my heart. I agree with what you're saying. I love this.
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Good job on the poem. The meaning behind it was expressed well and I really enjoyed it. It's too bad that life is this way sometimes. There's so much betrayal and pain in this world, but at least there's happiness too. I like the title...it was eye catching.
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THis was a good read. Congratulations on winning a silver trophy for this poem. I agree with the last comment, the line,
"Pain and lies, filled with despair
Torment and anguish, jealousy and deceit
A world with false love and resented obligation
A life where even karma isn’t fair
This world is only gonna break your heart"
are really good line.
All and all a very good read.
Well done.
Keep up the good work.
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Pain and lies, filled with despair
Torment and anguish, jealousy and deceit
A world with false love and resented obligation
A life where even karma isn’t fair
This world is only gonna break your heart
Well I can understand the scenario of this life here unraveled..you did a great poem here revealing the story of your heart touching the depth of the life here...The concept is made very clear through the poetic mastery here bringing a kind of the depth of this subject..a great poem indeed...you did an excellent job! Nice use of words as well. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. you did an excellent job! Nice use of words as well. Thank you
for sharing and best wishes to you.
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Great write. The title really caught my eye. I've been feeling this way for a long time now. This poem lets the oblivious really see how cruel the world and people in it can be and why there are so many of us willing to hate all of it and give up. Loved the poem, congrats on winning silver.
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well thanks for throwing that negative thought out there in the universe ! lol congrats on your win . this was a tender piece ( and by tender i mean more of a sensitive subject kind of tender ) truth hurts but it has to be stated , and you did that beautifully . keep penning
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haha, sorry to throw it out into the universe, but I think it was already known
Actually Im thinking of writing another poem linked to this but the opposite because as much the world is gonna break your heart, it also makes it
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I love Wicked Game... that's one of my favorite's do you know I wonder by Chris Isaacs? Not much of a HIM fan though... did he remake Wicked Game? Well congrats on the much deserved silver. Though this was an extremely... depressing piece... it's raw and real qualities made it enjoyable.
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Wow. This is just a very good poem. After reading this I was just like..wow..the world really does let you down over and over repeated again and again. But hopefully it doesn't always stay like that. It can only break into so manyt pieces before something good has to happen right? Well anyway, very good poem, well deserving to be applauded.
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It’s often hard to capture images so sharp and so vibrant that they actually paint a portrait for the reader to glimpse upon and savor at length, but you have certainly done that here. Don’t let the ink of your pen run dry!
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This broke MY heart!! However, this is all too true. The world can be a cruel and distorted place, preying upon the vulnerable.
"Nursery sits waiting for the little new comer
Mother mourns for a child she’ll never know
A tiny coffin gets put down to rest
A tormented life for a parent never to recover"
This part was my favorite because I think it broke my heart the most. The emotion here is so sad, but can be felt easily. You did a beautiful job of painting a picture of pain in different forms.
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good writing
you know, my kids are in prison, so i know about nver having a child to hold. ok? you got to make the best of what you got. and who the hell said life would be fair? or anytihing else... whip off your face, and get on with your life. that is just the way is. i'm sorry for you. but sometimes, thats just the way it is. pick yourself up. this ain't gonna' be you only disappointment in your life. for sure. love gypsyfish
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Thank you for your comment on my poem, but that is all that it is.. a poem.. I dont relate to any of these things, it's the heartache I've watched others go through, I myself am very optimistic by heart so I get what your saying
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I loved it
I love this poem. The truth is never pretty. You definatly have life's most unfair moments pin pointed here. The first part when she finds her lover in another mans arms is a very familiar scenario to me. Can't wait to read more of your work. -
Sadly, honestly, true
Sadly, this poem so relates to me, I started crying the second I started reading it, and even more when I read the part about the girl's dad and her....Wonderful right. You have become one of my new favorites....Great piece. Keep it going.
Slainte,
Mairin
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i love the this poem there is so life an truth in this piece of writing
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amazingly true
This poem made me cry. The truth behind this poem is difantely revealed in through the words. It is hard to imagine that this is how the world really is, but deep down inside we know its the truth.
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wow, this is awesome. great write...
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Congrats on your silver placement, this is a wonderful write. Very true, this world is going to break your heart, it's guaranteed, quality of life is how you deal with that heartbreak.
♥
whisper
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Incredibly expressive, graphic in a way that makes it so real. the imagery is just enough to exude the emotion required of such topics, but not so wordy as to make it distasteful. it's gritty- scathing because of the harsh truth. great write. this certainly deserved the spotlight on the front page.
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amazing simply amazing i love it
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I was waiting for something good. Even the most difficult lives have a molecule of goodness mixed in (at least for contrast). Have you heard Morrisey? Otherwise, good pacing
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Wow. This was really emotionally hardcore. I enjoyed reading it because of how raw and true it is. Very good write.
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Excellent
Nothing to say but praise..What a great write.
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I can't think of anything else to say but wow...disturbing but...wow.
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This absolutely floored me. As I was reading, some stanzas were so intense I held my breath. This is such an original piece with so many aspects of life woven within.
Your honesty was exceptional. Great job and well deserving a trophy.
Soulful Woman
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That poem is amazing sweetie! I absolutley love it!
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Well that sure caught my attention.
"Nursery sits waiting for the little new comer
Mother mourns for a child she’ll never know
A tiny coffin gets put down to rest
A tormented life for a parent never to recover"
Been there.
"Girl's mascara bleeds down her face
The man who stole her innocence walks away
Girl whispers under her breath “Why Daddy?”
She disappears without a trace"
Been there too. Just felt guitly and had to return. Still waiting to run forever.
Amazingly written. Beautiful really. Congratulations on the silver trophy, the gold winner must have blown Bella away litterally.
Bandaid.
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You just gave me goosebumps.. Im so sorry that you had had to suffer 2 of these stanzas, any person shouldnt even know of them, nevermind have to suffer them. Thank you for an amazing comment!!
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Wow, i loved this write. keep on going.
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Absoultely Amazing
This poem is so beautiful. I like the fact that it is realistic, based on life's unfortunate events. That is what my poetry is generally about. You are a very talented writer and I enjoyed your poem very much. The way you incorporated the title in between your stanzas was interesting. Nice Job
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very very good
this was very moving indeed many things in life will break your heart love most of all I fear -
creative
I find myself agreeing with so many of your emotions right now, since I have experienced so much of this lately...you begin to think, "What is going on?" However, I do believe that there is hope even in darkness if I trust in God...I do really like this thought though...Well done!
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sadly true
So much pain & hardship we bring upon ourselves. Yes the world does break so many hearts.
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people would met and marry and have children
but there's no money
He would do anything for her
but he can't pay the rent
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Wow. This is brilliant. Strong emotions and the wording conveyed them well. Nice touch with the repetition of "this world is only gonna break your heart". I am amazed. I love this piece. I love it I love it I love it.
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ooo wow
I like a lot. Has Donna's stamp of approval. I like dark and dreary poems. This, even though it is so real has to be the darkest poem that I have read all day. Very good. I love how after every little antedote you put this world is gonna break your heart. It bring rythm to the peice.
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L4 I think "slowing" should be "slowing"
This poem reminded me of the movie 'great expectations' (or a similar name).
The repetition of "this world is only gonna break your heart" is a nice touch
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Brilliant
A beautiful expression of pain, suffering and subtle twists of nostalgia.
Worth a standing ovation.
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Well applauds just for mentioning HIM! and I agree...they did a great cover. Now then...the poem itself, really quite powerful. Touches base with the most horrid of truths. I love the repetitive line "This world is gonna break your heart" so much wisdom in that line alone. I think the stanza that stuck out the most for me was #4, this is such a touchy subject for many and few can write about it with elegance and grace. Superb job overall, it was a pleasure to read. Best of Luck in the future.
~MotherMachineGunn~
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Good
Sad but true the world is a cruel place sometimes. It can also bring happiness too. Congratulation on the silver.
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Most compelling! What an exceptional amount of detailed imagery you have created to wrap the mind around and the metaphors you have used here are pure genius. Truly this is one of the more interesting pieces of art I have seen written on Allpoetry that I have enjoyed it to the fullest. This is quite masterfully penned!
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eh, they are all sad stories and its a GREAT poem, but i disagree with the world is only going to break your heart, and i feel sad if thats how you truley feel. its up to you to make the best of it. nice poem
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Well. The style was interesting, situation followed by a statement, and the sorrow of each situation is reflected fairly well. But I do very much differ with the point. It's very pessimistic and closed-minded.
Otherwise, good work
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Read this again. Cried again.
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I think it's great where you went with this, Helen. You didn't rewrite the song. You took drew inspiration from the idea and took it to a whole new level, well surpassing the song itself, on many levels. I have to say, that this is definitely one of my favorites of yours. I can tell this was very heartfelt and emotional. As others have already said, I love the repetion of the title throughout the poem, and the poem is beyond just simple sorrow. Very hard to read, but I'm sure it was even harder to write, but still excellent work and beautifully done.
-Ryan
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I LOVED IT!
wow. That's one hell of a poem! I love the way you put "This world is only gonna break your heart" after every stanza. I also REALLY love how each stanza was it's own story, but it was still connected to all the others. the last stanza, although not a new story, was still amazing. It's such a heart wrenching poem, even though I smiled all the way though it, I'm a morbid soul. The second stanza confused me for a little bit and I had to replay that whole verse before i really got it. >.< I was gonna put "oh i love this stanza the most and this one" But it's sooo hard to decide, i think the ones with the best wording though have to be 1, 3(my heart stopped), and 4. Good luck in all this is entered in, I really hope You win, it was an amazing write and it's going on my seldom used favorites list.
with all adoration,
~Soten Shinku-Ha Jaganshi
p.s.- ironically goes well with techno XD
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This is really great but so sad .
Although true sometimes .....
A wonderful read even though it makes my heart feel pain .
I think its great writing ,
Keep up the good work!
~Lisa~
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This is good, and I'm feeling that way myself. The world doesn't give a flying fuck, does it? The niggers don't care, the whites have money so they don't have to care. Parents - like mine - beat the fuck out of their kids until the kids are so fucked up they end up homeless (me), and nobody gives a shit right, left, up or down. Got you. - ocerus
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the world is gonna break youre heart,it may even kill you,good job
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Sad, but amazingly written. This is one of those poems that once you start reading, it's impossible to stop.
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This is really sad. But so true. It happens all to often in each case and not all of it ends well but there are times it does. Nice job and goodluck in the contests.
NoL
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this is a realy good poem, it speaks the honest truth and is realy moving! it is verry straightforward and realistic !! great job
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i can relate
These are the many untold pains of life that are seldom told. -
Very Good.
I liked how this was, it really shows that life isnt just a fairy tale as most people make of it. And most of these events within the poem, happen constantly throughout this world. Its nice to know that people realize how this life is. -
that was a knockout. straight uppercut of words. i loved the repition and the structure. each stanza was a great and fierce look into some real pain. wonderfully done. thank you for sharing this with us and keep up the writing
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A powerful piece that hits where it should. This world isn't fair, and living shall be the death of us, but whilst we are here, let's have more work like this. Superb job.
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Amazing
What can i say, this is just great. Almost more truth in this peice than people can handle. The flow was pretty good. All in all, great work.
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For flow, change this line from "The man who has stole her innocence walks away" to
"...who stole..." or "who has stolen"
Very true and beautiful, stunning work
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Thank you so much, I've been staring at that stanza knowing there wasnt something right, and I stared at it for so long I couldnt see anything anymore, THANK YOU!!
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I'm glad you appreciate my correction, I was worried I'd get one of those "STOP BEING AN ANNOYING OBBSESSIVE CORRECTOR!!! JUST READ THE DAMN POEM!!!" Thanks for not virtually screaming at me
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This was so true and such a great poem. I hope you win the contest this in. My favorite part was the last stanza, where you wrote "A life where even Karma isn't fair". The subject was broad, so almost everyone can relate.
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Jesus Christ. Ok, well I'm not sure how to comment this poem... I basically have so much praise that there's not enough space on the page for me to write them all down.
Very, very hard-hitting. Mainly so because it is extremely true, bitingly true. Beautiful rhyme scheme with a very extensive use of language. Each stanza is so... immaculate, so... indescribable (sp?) that it leaves you feeling like you've been punched in the stomach. This poem takes every experience of grief and rips the shroud off it.
All I can say is, well done for this jaw-dropping piece of art. Keep up this excellent work.
ELW xx
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Oh thank you so much for such kind words!!!
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you write from your heart, I can just imagine all of it. very sad, but true.
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