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Forward Observation Post, Royal Artillery, Italy 1944

In the valley all is deathly still;
dry river bed and broken bridge
shimmering in the sun's heat.
Sentinel cypresses,
on the distant slope,
disintegrate
as shells burst
among
them.

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  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    June 23, 2007

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    I thought this was an interesting choice of topic and I felt the stillness and then the explosions. I am enjoying how a simple form can take poets in so many different directions. Thank you for entering this contest and good luck.


  • Sabir Abdus Samee
    June 23, 2007
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    A very good poem on the World War II and Royal Artillery.