Born of light and commonplace, brought to eve of darkest space.
By light of morn and coming day--bewitching hours for elf and fae.
Time is lost with every page; the fate of many on vengence's stage.
Laced in jewels of a thousand's chore, left to learn the way before.
Tarry by lands, forgotten with pain; traveler of light or traveler of rain.
Gypsy, cast the runes of stone granted last the truth alone.
Tryo brought by scrolls once dead, tempted now by things unsaid.
Pasts to follow, in light and deed; passions narrow to darker creed.
Vanity's sake would chance implore-- vexed by sin, the father's score.
Bless the child that answers true; believe in light: no darkness due.
Yet as with peace the prophets lied: yearning for the farce decried.
She who carries on with troth, so in darkness all with loathe.
Take the path that journeys on, testing hearts--to truth be drawn.
Precious jewel of mother's light, past has not the comely sight.
Roads left hollow in ancient ways, reek of death and worlds ablaze.
Dream of peace, young, errant waif, do not stray from light so safe.
Let the choice fade to the past; leaving all with childhood, last.
Hidden flaw of good and true, how can this dream be ever true?
Truth be heard! Through each their due, the light is bled to misconstrue.
So do the latter; will, be faint! Such is how the world we'll paint.
No more the choice of truth so pure; now the knave of deaths obscure.
Born of light and commonplace, brought to eve of darkest space.
Author notes
Mystery. Which way will Beija go?
This is done in a format that I sort of enjoy. Especially because of the challenge.
1. Rhyme at 1/2 point and end of line.
2. First letter of line and of word after 1st rhyme word must be the same.
Trust me, not always easy. Try coming up with something that starts with Z and then another one that starts with Z. e_e Exactly. Not simple.
Tyro [tie roh]= beginner, apprentice, person new to something
Troth [tr oh th] = one's word of promise
::: SPOILER :::
The storyline herein is basically what follows. Do no read unless you really want to know.
This character is faced with a problem. She's uncovered a truth about her family. If she tells someone, it could destroy her mother. If she doesn't, she could destroy herself and her siblings. By choosing (like her mother) to remain silent, she'll forfeit any chance that she and her sisters and brothers will not make the same mistakes. By choosing to voice this blemish, she'll destroy everything her mother has worked for (good or bad).
At first, she chooses to keep silent, but when things start turning out more and more like it had when her mother was her age, she decided enough was enough. The truth killed her mother inside and turned her out from her family. It solved the trouble, but now she's cursed to be forgotten entirely.
As for what the particular tidbit is, you might have to guess. This is based on a character in the making right now and she's quite a bit of an interest to me. Her name is Beija (it's a mix of two words meaning Precious Jewel).
Here's the link to this poem written as it ought to be. The lines are REALLY long.
http://violetraven.com/forum/viewtopic.php?p=5221#5221
A contest entry
- Fantasy Extreme by Star-of-David.
353 points, ended June 26, 2007, 4 entries
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Comments
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This is by far one of the most interesting writes I've seen since I joined allpoetry. I haven't seen it before, and it works wonderfully well for the fantasy genre. Plus you've kept to the generic codes and conventions of fantasy by being descriptive and painting a world and situation in the readers mind. Good write.
Good luck in the contest.
SaintJimmy
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