You’re the star I wish upon at night
When talking to you everything feels right
You bring to me comfort, joy, and a smile
When I talk to you I laugh all the while
You’re like my angel, sent from above
Whenever I sleep, it’s you I dream of
The impact you’ve had you may never know
I pray that I’ll never be forced to let go
Never before have I been so addicted
You knew all along, it’s what you predicted.
You’ve been there for me through good times and bad
The ups and the downs, whether happy or sad
I want you to know I’m here for you too
For you there is little that I wouldn’t do
You’ve shown your patience and given advice
Revealing your virtues as well as your vice
There isn’t a single trait I abhor
You’ll always be the one I adore
For you are the one who changed my perception
Without any tricks or means of deception
And if by chance some day we do meet
My hopes and desires will then be complete
Author notes
This is about someone in my life. I haven't met him in person yet but I talk to him almost every day either online or on the phone.
A contest entry
- WORD PROMPT #3—Friend by going nowhere.
1000 points, ended June 23, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent
Very well done. A wonderful take on the prompt.
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I was reading through some of my comments and noticed you commented me more than once, and I don’t remember if I’ve commented you yet so I figured I would stop by and return the favor.
I liked this poem a lot. The word use for the rhyme scheme was amazing. I connected with this poem. Meeting people other than face to face contact is becoming more common, so I have a feeling a good many people could connect to this poem. I also liked the way this poem flowed, and how you worked in poetic prose with out getting too thick into metaphors and hidden meanings. Bravo, well done, keep up the good work.
Best of wishes -Night-
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Thank you for the comment, I really appreciate it. I hope you're doing well.
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GREEEAT.
GREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAT GREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEAT WRITE, YOUR WORDS WAS CHOSEN OUTSTANDINGLY! -
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Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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I really like the positve tone in this....so much diffrent then your last one you wrote. I am so glad for you that you have some to be there for you, I wished that I had someone like that right now. But the ending confused me...becuase it sounded like you had met this person already..but at the end "If by chance some day we do met/ my hopes and desires will then be complete". This is a very good write, so full of emotion, dreams, and hope.
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The ending is there because I do talk to the person on the phone and chat to him online but I've never actually met the person. One day I plan to, but until then I'm making due with chatting online and listening to him on the phone. He's the best friend I've ever had.
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whoa.. this is a really good poem... like.. amazing...
why cant i write like this??? ... crap... oh well
GOOD JOB!!
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this isn't my best writing, it's actually one I wrote a few months ago. But thank you, and in time I still believe you could write just as well if not better.
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wow... it is amazing how much i can relate to this... thanks so much for your entry and best wishes in the contest.
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thanks for your comment
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