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Outsider

Hiding myself behind a world of shame
Tears fall onto my bed
Wishing things where right

A longing to fit in
But pushed away as an outsider
Never belonging to one group

I pull the knife out of my wallet
Flipping it over and over in my hands
So tempting to end the struggle

Constantly hurting the ones I care about
The arguing, battling my slipping grades
Pushing the real me beneath a mask

The blade slides across my hand,
The blood falls to the floor
I cry out, regretting the deed already

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  • DestiniesTwined
    February 11, 2008
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    This is my life in words. Great job.


  • tawk gold member
    July 19, 2007

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    It is so hard to survive when you feel so all alone. I could feel your pain and heartache throughout your write. Wonderful imagery

    You have just been Hood-Winked


  • broken daisies
    July 7, 2007

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    ...

    im the same
    this poem describes my emotions exactly
    i understand the feeling of being pushed away, of struggling to keep up my grades and keep the cuts away.
    this is a really pretty poem.


  • badddgirl
    July 5, 2007

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    Yanked at my heart!

    Wow

    this is a sad poem, I was almost in tears!

    Thanks and good luck!

    Hiding myself behind a world of shame
    Tears fall onto my bed
    Wishing things where right

    A longing to fit in
    But pushed away as an outsider
    Never belonging to one group


  • Devoted Huntress
    June 25, 2007

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    Wonderful job in this poem my dear... I like how it describes the pain in one's life the hurt and sorrow and how bad it can feel to be pushed away and an outsider to all... to not belong in any group but in one by yourself alone... I know how that feels then I came to AP and met people who made me feel better for myself... I like how this poem is written an I hope that you continue the great work. Keep it up hun alright?


  • MagazinesFall
    June 24, 2007

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    3rd line: "wishing things where right" did you mean were?
    Other than that the poems seems perfect.
    It's sad though that you think you do not belong.
    I'm sorry that you felt that way.
    I'm sorry if you still feel that way.
    But the poem is very well written!
    "A longing to fit in
    But pushed away as an outsider"
    These lines are interesting because I've always thought that you didn't want to fit in but be different... you know what I mean?
    Well good luck with the contest!
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