To weave each word, each strand of thought,
Each tiny glimpse of image caught.
Each hint of taste, as yet untold,
To be tried as words unfold.
Each silent sound a dazzling thread,
Which helps to fashion hope or dread.
Sweet tinge of scent, not half gone,
Delicately spun in flowing song.
Every simple texture words create,
Artfully woven to illistrate
The story, the poem, the fabric of dreams
The written words and sewn seams
A world embroidered in shades of black and white,
A wonderland paradise to let your mind take flight.
Where no idea is lost, no thought absurd
Not in written art, nor woven word.
Author notes
option 4
Rhymes - hope you like it
Option E2 - that is right, tomorrow I am writing more poems!
A contest entry
- Weird Options Contest by Kimojuno.
456 points, ended July 12, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Great Poetry! by Not-The-Sun.
650 points, ended June 29, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - B.E.S.T. by buggirl.
700 points, ended July 3, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Do you deserve this? by Never Fall in Love.
850 points, ended August 14, 2007, 60 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - "Your Favorite Prewrite" by Virgoan.
500 points, ended September 3, 2007, 101 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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THis is really amazing
i loved reading this it was like it was weaving my thoughts in through it and takes you on a little journey with the rhyming of the words
it is really really good kate..xo!!!
really talented you are
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I like the craft inside this woven piece
Thanks so much for participating in my contest. I wish you all the best. I encourage you to keep on writing my friend.
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wow ... this is excellent.
I love your rhymes here .. it shows true talent. I only think that you could improve on the flow in certain areas and the stanza before the last.
The last just brought it all together gracefully ...
excellent.
NeveR ♥
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"Sweet tinge of scent, not half gone,
Delicately spun in flowing song."
Wow, beautifully written and great metaphores, I love this poem and you did a great job. It gives me chills to read, I appreciate you entering.
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this is really a melodious flowing song...
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pretty. thanks for entering my contest!
Jen -
nice write, very interesting how you set it up with rhyming and over the thoughts in the poem, well done. good luck and thanks for entering
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Original
Great imagery and use of the senses is wonderfully well penned. I like the simple and flowing rhyme scheme, it carries one softly from beginning to end. You might wand to check that last line, I think you mean 'not' instead of 'no'. Best wishes.
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Very dreamily written. I like the lines "Sweet tinge of scent, not half gone, Delicately spun in flowing song."
The idea of scent, touch, and sound mingling together is very appealing to my artistic senses. ^_^
I give this poem two orange Creamsicles. And a napkin. ^_^
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"A world embroidered in shades of black and white,
A wonderland paradise to let your mind take flight."
I really like those lines. The rhyming in this is really good. Very simple, but good! Love it! -
you have managed to
delight the senses with the descriptions contained herein...
"Delicately spun in flowing song."
that line is actually a great representation of this piece! nicely done!
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Really beautiful thoughts coming from the Land of the Long White Cloud. My best wishes to you for the contests you have entered.
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i love this! rhyming is my favorite kind of writings but i'm not really good at it.. anyway...i like this part "each silent sound dazzling thread, which helps to fashion hope or dread"
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