Hollow eyes stare back at me
Tears fall to the dark abyss
A shallow pool of scarlet anguish
Lying face-down in my dreadful mistakes
Bleeding sorrows and guilt
Breathing only to exist
You whisper why
Unable to answer, I collapse
The last of my strength gone
A solitary tear
The knife resting beside me
My arms giving my dying embrace
A contest entry
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600 points, ended June 24, 2007, 28 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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oOo! I really like this poem, it is packed full of emotion. Keep it up!
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This is so sad and so full of raw emotion. Please don't hurt yourself, things will work out, just keep the faith. I have enjoyed reading your poetry this morning. I hope your day is great. Enjoy being Hood-Winked
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"Breathing only to exist"
This line is exquisite. It has so much meaning to it
"My arms giving my dying embrace"
I don't quite understand that one, It doesn't make sense to me, it feels like it needs another word in there...maybe "my arms giving in to my dying embrace? I don't know but other than that the poem is very nice!
I wish you luck with your contest!
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I liked it. It was very sad and painful. The last stanza was my favorite! Good luck!!!
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